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"About Me"
My name is ____, living in Seoul, and I am a freshman in my high school. I have my father, my mother and my little brother. My father is a live fish distributor, and works very hard without showing any tiredness in his face while he works everyday from daybreak to night. My mother is a housewife and takes care of all of my family and supports them.
My parents love my brother and me so much. I respect my parents who are always working hard for my brother and me. My brother is a first grader in middle school, and he is active and cheerful. He is an ice hockey player in his school. Some time ago, he was a goalkeeper of his team, and now he wants to play a role in offense.

I like to listen to music, surf the Net, read books, and go to the movies. I also like to play games with my friends or my family, and watch the sports games. During the 2002 Korea-Japan World Cup, my family, my friends, and I went to the stadium near my house where the games were showed on the big screen, and we all cheered for our team. When I spend leisure time with my friends, I ride a bicycle in the park or go to the movies. Very rarely I go to the singing room or the amusement park near my house.

In Korea, we have a lot of American culture such as fast food chains and pop songs, but I don’t think these are enough to know the entire American culture. I have been dreaming of experiencing real American home life and school life not just a trip to the US, so I was excited when my mother talked about the program, which allowed me to study in American high school with low price and stay American home for free. At first, I was not sure if I could do well in the US alone. But I developed my confidence through the stories and news about exchange students and exchange student programs. I thought to myself “If they can do it, why not me?” Some time ago, my friends and I, just two of us went to Japan. Though that trip, I learned that I could do everything I wanted if I had the confidence.
Of course, as a Korean, I want to deliver Korean culture to my future host family as much as possible. As an exchange student, I want to leave a good impression of Korea and Korean on the host family, and I want to see America with my own eyes and feel American culture for myself. Of course, I will study hard. I am sure that it will be good for my future host family and me, because I can improve my English by experiencing American culture, and my host family will learn a lot about Korea, and Koreans through the exchange student program.