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Odessa Dawn Posted 11 years ago
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You are always ready to offer help ...?
You are always ready to offer help, and have the desire to help the needy, which is the secret of your strength and good will. Coming to others aid is hardwired into you. You are so hugely central in my life; willing to sharing my great concerns, for which I am very indebted to you and I just want to repay your kindness. Thank you so very much—and I owe you one.
May I know where I should make some improvements?
May I know where I should make some improvements?
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Could you tell me where I should make some improvements? It is too wordy and you are badly mixing register between the lyrical ( 'the desire to help the needy'; sharing my great concerns'') and slang ('hardwired'; 'I owe you one'). In western English, a simple ' Thank you very much for your continued kindness ' would be more than adequate.
- Could you tell me where I should make some improvements?
- It is too wordy and you are badly mixing register between the lyrical ( 'the desire to help the needy'; sharing my great concerns'') and slang ('hardwired'; 'I owe you one').
- In western English, a simple ' Thank you very much for your continued kindness ' would be more than adequate.
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Could you tell me where I should make some improvements?
It is too wordy and you are badly mixing register between the lyrical ( 'the desire to help the needy'; sharing my great concerns'') and slang ('hardwired'; 'I owe you one').
In western English, a simple 'Thank you very much for your continued kindness' would be more than adequate.
It is too wordy and you are badly mixing register between the lyrical ( 'the desire to help the needy'; sharing my great concerns'') and slang ('hardwired'; 'I owe you one').
In western English, a simple 'Thank you very much for your continued kindness' would be more than adequate.
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