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FlyGirl Posted 21 years ago

You Are

0 You're my man, my mighty king,02br
00And I'm the jewel in your crown,02br
00You're the sun so hot and bright,02br
00I'm your light-rays shining down,02br
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00You're the sky so vast and blue,02br
00And I'm the white clouds in your chest,02br
00I'm a river clean and pure,02br
00Who in your ocean finds her rest,02br
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00You're the mountain huge and high,02br
00I'm the valley green and wide,02br
00You're the body firm and strong,02br
00And I'm a rib bone on your side,02br
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00You're an eagle flying high,02br
00I'm your feathers light and brown,02br
00You're my man, my king of kings,02br
00And I'm the jewel in your crown. 0-
  

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0 Very, very good, FlyGirl! A nice conceit, nicely rendered. 02br 02br 0-

— Mister Micawber

  • 0 Very, very good, FlyGirl!
  • A nice conceit, nicely rendered.
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0 Very, very good, FlyGirl! A nice conceit, nicely rendered. Simple, clear and effective.02br
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00 The last two lines are, as you know, repetitive, and are a let-down for the reader; they need to be replaced with a whole new idea to climax your piece-- a pithy summary of the complementary relationship between he and she.02br
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0thank you Mister Micawber, 05000 I know the last 2 lines are repetitive that's because I thought it would be nice 2 end the poem with those 2 lines.010id1
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It has come to our attention that this poem was previously posted at another site, [url=http://www.lovepoemsandquotes.com/LovePoem07.html]LOVE POEMS AND QUOTES[/url] under the name of NIMA AKBARI.

I trust that you and Nima are the same person, Flygirl? Otherwise, you may be accused of p
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0 Hi everyone! I'm interested in the poem 'You are', it's really nice but I have a problem because I can't find any information about Nima Akbari! Where does she come from? 02br
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