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The bar chart gives information about the rate of Australian taking to regular physical activity in term of 6 age groups by gender in 2010.

Overall, while men in the middle age groups showed their interest in in exercising, the number of women in this age groups was higher than that of others. People aged from 15 to 24 were in favour of doing physical activities with the highest total proportion.

Over half of young boys whose ages ranged from 15 to 24 took part in physical activity ( 52,8%). The rate decreased sharply as men became older and bottomed at 39,5% when they were between the age from 35 to 44. Such an opposite trend could be seen according to the increasing age when it held 43% for 45-to-54-age group, 41,5% for 55-to-64-age group and 46.7% for the old.

In contrast, the percentage of women at the age between 15 and 24 doing physical activity stood at the second lowest rank with 47.7%, slightly higher than that of people over 65 with 47,1%. The percentage of female players doing physical exercises who were from 45 to 54 years old held the lion’s share at 53,3%, making a difference of 0,3% with 45-to-64 age people, 0,8% with 35-to-44 age people and 4,6% with 25-to-34-age people.

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The bar chart gives information about the rate (Wrong word.) of Australian (Australian is an adjective. You must have a noun after it.) taking to regular physical activity in term (wrong form; also wrong word) of 6 age groups by gender in 2010. (What are the age groups?)

Overall, while men in the middle age groups (What age groups?) showed their interest in in exercising, the number (Wrong word) of women in this age groups was higher than that of others. ~~People aged from 15 to 24 were in favour of doing physical activities with the highest total proportion.~~ (The percentages for people aged 15-24 were the highest of all the age groups. -- But that is not what the chart shows for women.)

Over half of young boys (Wrong word. A 24-year-old male is not a boy, but a man. Young boys are ages 5-10.) whose ages ranged from 15 to 24 took part in physical activity ( 52,8%). The rate (Wrong word - the chart shows percentages.) decreased sharply as men became older and bottomed at 39,5% when they were between the age (wrong form) from 35 to 44. Such an opposite trend could be seen according to the increasing age when it held 43% for 45-to-54-age group, 41,5% for 55-to-64-age group and 46.7% for the old.

In contrast, the percentage of women at the age between 15 and 24 doing physical activity stood at the second lowest rank with 47.7%, slightly higher than that of people over 65 with 47,1%. The percentage of female players (wrong word) doing physical exercises who were from 45 to 54 years old held the lion’s share (??) at 53,3%, making a difference of 0,3% with 45-to-64 age people, 0,8% with 35-to-44 age people and 4,6% with 25-to-34-age people.

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The bar chart compares the percentages of Australian men versus women who did regular physical activity, divided into six age groups. The data is from one year, 2010. The six age groups are: 15 to 24, 25 to 34, 35 to 44, 45 to 54, 55 to 64 and over 64.

In round numbers, the data ranged between 39% and 53%. Except for the youngest age group, more women than men participated in regular exercise. The gender gap was highest in the middle age groups, about a 12% gap for the 35-to-44 year olds, and 10% for the next higher age group. This gap was narrowest (less than 1%) in the 65-and-over age group, about 47% for both sexes. The data showed clear age-related patterns, rather than random variations.

For men, the percentage was highest, nearly 53%, for the youngest age group. It declined to a low of about 40% for the 35-to-44 year olds, and then increased again to 47% in the oldest age group. For women, the data was more consistent; there was less variation. In the youngest age group, about 47% did regular exercise. This rose slightly (about 5%) to 52-53 percent in the middle age groups (35 to 64), and then declined to about 47% in the oldest age group.

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