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The bar chart gives information about the annual amount of waste disposed by an European country in the period of four years from 2005 to 2008, counted by million tonnes.

Overall, while the amount of waste disposed by landfill showed a remarkable downward trend, the figure of waste burnt was in the opposite tendency.

In 2005, landfill was the most common method used to dispose waste, taking up 180 million tonnes, much higher than the figure of burning and dumping at sea with 500 and 600 million tonnes respectively. Throughout 4 years, there was a considerable increase in the amount of landfill waste to the rock bottom at 600 million tonnes by 2008. In contrast, from the lowest point at the beginning, the amount of waste burnt grew markedly and regularly, making this method of disposing hold the first rank at 900 million tonnes in the last year shown.

Differently, starting off from 600 million tonnes, waste dumped into the ocean experienced a slight increase in its amount, reaching a peak of 620 million tonnes before going down in the remainder of the period to the third rank at 550 million tonnes.

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The bar chart gives ~~information about~~ the annual amount of waste disposed by an a European country in the period of four years from 2005 to 2008, ~~counted by~~ in millions of tonnes. (Waste is non-count. )

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You did not give an adequate description of the figure in the first paragraph. You should mention that it compares three different methods of waste disposal: landfill, burning and dumping in the sea.

Overall, while the amount of waste disposed by landfill showed a remarkable (be specific. Use numerical values, not descriptive words. It declined by two-thirds. ) downward trend, the figure (wrong word. In scientific contexts, a figure is a diagram, chart, map or table.) of waste burnt was in the opposite tendency. (wrong word). (It increased by 80%.)

In 2005, landfill was the most common method used to dispose waste, taking up 180 million tonnes, much higher than the figure of burning and dumping at sea with 500 and 600 million tonnes respectively. Throughout the 4 years, there was a considerable increase (Increase?) in the amount of landfill waste to the rock bottom (That is not a good mathematical phrase) at 600 million tonnes by 2008. In contrast, from the lowest point at the beginning, the amount of waste burnt grew markedly and regularly, making this method of ~~disposing~~ disposal hold the first rank at 900 million tonnes in the last year shown.

Differently, starting off from 600 million tonnes, waste dumped into the ocean experienced a slight increase in its amount, reaching a peak of 620 million tonnes before going down in the remainder of the period to the third rank at 550 million tonnes.

You missed the most important observation on this chart.

In 2005, a total of 2900 million tonnes of waste was disposed of, and that declined by about 30% over the four years to 2050.

The proportions of the disposal methods also changed. In 2005, 62% of the waste was put in landfills, 20% burned, and the remainder (18%) dumped at sea. In 2008, 44% was burned, 30% was put in landfills, and 26% dumped in the sea.

Compared to the other disposal methods, the amount dumped at sea did not change much; it varied between 550 and 620 million tonnes, a variation of about 12%. Even though its proportion increased from 18% to 26% over the period, the amount disposed of was 20 million tonnes lower in 2008 than it was in 2005.

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