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I have completed my report on a line graph, somebody please help me check it and identify my mistakes, I'm taking the Ielts in 1 month. Thank you very much!!!

The line graph indicates the amount of four different types of food which people in a European country consummed from 1979 to 2004.

Overall, fish is the least commonly used food throughout the period. Also, the spending on beef, lamb and finish all declined while there was a fluctuating increase in the figure for chicken.

It can be seen from the graph that in 1979, the amount of fish eaten was the lowest among four types of food, with only about 60 grams per person per week. This figure fluctuatingly decreased to around 50 in 2004. Similarly, expenditure on beef also plummeted over the period, even though it was the most comsummed food in 1979. After 25 years, the figure reduced from more than 200 to only approximately 100 grams per person per week.

In 1979, the amount of beef and lamb consummed had the same starting index, with approximately 150 grams. From 1979 to 2004, this country witnessed an dramatic growth to 250 grams in the consumption of chicken. In contrast, the figure for lamb steadily dropped and reached only over 50 grams in 2004.

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The line graph indicates the amount of four different types of food which people in a European country consummed from 1979 to 2004.

Your first paragraph is not complete. What types of food are there? Is it the total amount they ate?

To write paragraph 1, make a list of all the noun phrases which cover the essential elements of the figure. You can think about paraphrasing, but paraphrasing usually produces poor results in describing a mathematical diagram.
For example, look at the noun phrases for this exercise. All are essential to completely describe the figure.

1. Fish and meat consumption ( paraphrase: amount of fish eaten)

2. Three types of meat: lamb, beef, chicken

3. twenty five years, 1979-2004

4. 5-year intervals

5. grams per person per week (paraphrase: weekly per capita amounts in grams)

6. European country

In many Task 1 tests, it is not possible to describe the figure completely on one sentence. Write two or even three sentences to be complete.

Here is an example. It uses words from the list above.

The line graph compares the amounts of beef, chicken, lamb and fish that people in a European country ate on a weekly basis during a specific 25-year period, 1979 to 2004. The units of measure are grams (of meat) per person per week. The values in the graph range from a low of about 50 to a high of 250.

Overall, fish is the least commonly used ( wrong word. we do not use food. We use computers, cellphones and tools.) food throughout the period. Also, the spending ( wrong word.. The graph does not show money. We spend money. We do not spend food.) on beef, lamb and finish all declined while there was a ~~fluctuating~~ increase in the figure (poor word choice. Try to avoid "figure" in task 1. In science articles, a figure is a diagram inserted into the text.) . for chicken.

~~It can be seen from the graph that~~ (These words do not describe the graph. Only describe the graph. Not how you look at it.) . in 1979, the amount of fish eaten was the lowest among four types of food, with only about 60 grams per person per week. This figure ~~fluctuatingly~~ decreased to around 50 in 2004. Similarly, expenditure (wrong word) on beef also plummeted (Do not use emotional words in Task 1. Use these words for Task 2. The vocabulary for Task 1 must be objective, scientific and mathematical. Do not use "plummet" , "rocket" "soar" or such graphic words. Instead use from the graph. ) over the period, even though it was the most comsummed food in 1979. After 25 years, the figure (poor word choice) reduced from more than 200 to only approximately 100 grams per person per week.

Example paragraph:

There was more variation in the amounts of meat (chicken, beef, or lamb) that people ate than in the amount of fish that they ate. People tended to eat the same amount of fish per week, but it decreased slightly over the period, from a little over 50 grams in 1979, to a bit under that value in 2004.

In 1979, the amount of beef and lamb consummed had the same starting index, (wrong word) with approximately 150 grams. From 1979 to 2004, this country witnessed (Do not use anthropomorphic verbs "see," "experience" or "witness" in Task 1.) an dramatic growth to 250 grams in the consumption of chicken. In contrast, the figure (poor word choice) for lamb steadily dropped and reached only over 50 grams (Do not use open-ended expressions such as "over 50 grams." 100 grams is over 50 grams, and so is 400 grams. Qualify the expression: "barely / just / a little over 50 grams.") in 2004.

Vocabulary:

fluctuate, fluctuation

These graphs illustrate the concept of fluctuation. Fluctuation is a rapid change in a value above and below a trend line or constant value.

Most Task 1 tests do not show fluctuation, but variation. Use "variation," "vary" "variable".

1. Cyclical or seasonal fluctuation:

2. Random fluctuation (often due to instability in the instrumentation)

3. Random fluctuation due to market forces. Prices often fluctuate as buyers and setters try to agree on a price:

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