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Nowadays, many people the want to be an idol to take benefits for them. However,be an idol can have a lot of advantages and disadvantages. In this essay, I will discuss the benefits and dangers of to be an idol.
Firstly, to be an idol they can achieve more other privileges like modern fashion, go some country they like,... Secondly, any idol like singer, model, dancer they always perform so they can earn a lot of money from their community. like in Korea, in this country they have three big community entertainment( SM entertainment, YG entertainment and JYP entertainment) they often call these community entertainment is "3Big". Their idol always perform a lot of concert so they can earn lots of money from their community. Thirdly, if they are normal people everyone don't pay attention them but if they become an idol they can be everyone's attention. many idol they alway get attention about their fan. Actually, in Korea many famous bands like Blackpink, Twice, Red Velvet, BTS,... people always care them because they are very famous on around the world.
However, it is very dangerous if they want to become an idol. many idols they don't have their personal life, they always being someone else invaded the personal life. idol can become object of paparazzi. idol can feel annoyed about paparazzi and crazy fans. paparazzi and crazy fans they always anoy their idol everywhere. sometimes idol and take threaten of paparazzi and cray fans so they always scared. In addition, idol they always perform so they always tired and can get stress. idols they want to take a rest but they can because their community require they perform day by day so they do not have free time to take a rest or do any active they like. Moreover, sometimes idol can take a little fault but everyone think this is a big fault so they always criticized them. many idols they get criticized they can think optimistic so some idols can kill themselves.
become an idol can get a lot of benefits like they can achieve more other privileges, earn a lot of money or they can be everyone's attention. To be an idol it very good. However,if they want to be an idol they must be careful because to be an idol it has a lot of dark sides.