Writing to Communicate

Hi,

I am supposed to write a paragraph about one of the most common academic writing situations.

So here is the assignment and my paragraph. Could you please go through and give me a quick paraphrase of it if necessary? Do the sentences sound right? How can the paragraph be re-written in a more natural way? I would appreciate any comments you might have.

Thank you so much.

1. You are a student in an art class. Your professor has asked you to describe a member of your family in detail so that the other students can draw a picture from your descriptions. Consider the person’s age, size, hair, face, and anything else that will help the other students form a picture in their mind of that person.

Today I am going to say what my youngest cousin Semih is like. ( or should I say Today I am going to describe my youngest cousin. His name is Semih.) He is nine years old. He is a third-year student at a primary school. Because he is probably one of the tallest pupils in the classroom, his teacher, Ms Kevser, every so often makes comments about his height. This year, he has grown to a height of 1 metre and 35 centrimetres. He is quite slim actually. His legs are long and thin. He has brown round eyes that are big like two sunshine. He has long dark hair. He sometimes arranges his hair as Justin Bieber does. Those times Semih resembles him very closely. He has fair skin. His face is lovely, the cutiest thing ever. I don’t think he has a wide forehead. His ears are small, not too long, not flap-eared. His eyebrows are thick ( OR dense? ) and longish. By the way, he has chubby cheeks and there is a funny spot just right on his left side of his face. Even though he is still nine, he has (even) already a stache vaguely. He is also a chirpy boy, happy and active most of the time. All in all, Semih is a most smart and intelligent kid? boy? Or lad? He has a radiant smile and his fun-loving attitude makes him more endearing.