Writing task in IELTS

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Write about the topic : University should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

According to the topic: University should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. In my opinion, it has a lot of reasons to agree and disagree with this thesis.

Firstly, I want to mention the balance of idea in studying process. As you can see, in gender, woman and man have lots of discrepancy in ideas. Because of the conception, vision, … that leads to this problem. If university accepted equal numbers of male and female students in every subject, the balance of idea would be set up, many angles would be improved, such as education, social, commercial ,… That’s why I agree with the following statement.

Secondly, some subjects are not suitable for woman. It is not because of the gender equality, the main reason is the differences between male and female’s bodies. They have different body’s structure, strength, limitation, … So that I disagree with this thesis.

Nowadays, virtually universities on the world allow students to choose the subjects. That means every student can select and register the subjects which are suitable for their hobbies, their jobs in the future. I believe that they could make a right decision, be responsible for their life, fairness and equality in every angle.