Writing task 2- TOEFL . TOPIC: EDUCATION

Hi everybody, today I write an essay about taking a gap year. Hope to receive your support.

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Task 2:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? After completing high school, students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
After finishing their study at high school, it would be better for students to take a gap year to work or travel before entering their universities. I completely agree with this statement.
To begin with, when students spend one year working or travelling, they can gain valuable experiences and broaden their horizons, which can help them to identify their career path before studying at university. For example, a good friend of mine told me that 4 years ago, after graduating from his high school, he took a one-year break, travelling throughout Vietnam. According to him, during the trip, he travelled to many interesting destinations, made new friends and also learned about the history of regions that he visited. All of which really motivated him to become a tour guide. Therefore, after finishing his long trip, he decided to study in an Academy of Tourism and Hospitality, in which, he would be trained as a professional tour guide.
Furthermore, taking a gap year before going to university can enable students to acquire educational experiences and life skills, which can greatly support their studies at university. For instance, before studying at their university in the US, some talented students, apply for seasonal jobs at some top companies such as Microsoft, Google and Facebook. Working temporarily in these companies allows them to learn soft skills such as communication skills, problem-solving skills, and planning skills. They also have a grasp of activities in some departments they are working for such as the business department, management department and human resources department. When they begin studying at university, they can easily understand related-fields subjects and also apply their soft skills to school activities. As such, they would gain academic excellence in their universities without making many efforts.
To sum up, I believe that spending at least one-year working or travelling could benefit students, graduating from high school, before going to study at university. Many of them can determine clearly which jobs they would like to do, owing to meaningful experience and perspectives acquired from trips. Meanwhile, other students can be able to equip themselves with various life-skills and necessary knowledge from their seasonal jobs, which in turn, will substantially benefit them in their study afterwards.