Writing task 2- the family

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THE TOPIC:

In many countries today, people in cities either live alone or in small family units, rather than in large family groups. Is this a positive or negative trend?

THE ESSAY:

In the recent years, the family size has been smaller than it used to be, and, this situation has had a number of profound impacts on not only individual life but also all aspects of society. In my opinion, there are both advantages and disadvantages in this case.

On the one hand, fewer members in a family can cause negative effects on family relationship and the national economy. Firstly, in modern society, the generation, when they are in the nest-leaving age, has a tendency to get away from house and live independently. It means that there is less time for children and parents to interact with each other, thus weakening the knit-close family bonds. Furthermore, the increase of nuclear family is due to delaying parenthood. As a result, the number of young people in the workforce would decline in the long period, which have adverse effects on the sustainability of national economy.

On the other hand, besides drawbacks the development of small family tree also bring many benefits. In fact, almost members in a small family will often have a better living standard than in the family with many generations. For example, only child will be fostered and educated better, since their parents allocate all their resources to nurture him. In addition, fewer people in a family can lower breadwinner’s burden. It is obvious that if man has to look after a large extended family, he will be under a bigger amount of responsibility than their counterparts.

In conclusion, nowadays, nuclear families have been in the ever-increasingly development. I personally think that although this development causes many disadvantages, there are also a wide variety of advantages.