Writing task 2: please help me review this essay.

The best way to reduce youth crime is to educate their parents with parental skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some feel that equipping parents with sufficient parental skills and knowledge will enable them to educate their children better, preventing them from committing crimes when they are young. I completely agree that these skills play a vital role in establishing children's personality and morals, and shaping their attitude towards the world, which contribute largely to decrease crimes committed by the youngsters.

Personality and morals are greatly influenced by their parents. Parents who lack of parental skills usually cannot create an optimal environment for children to develop themselves properly. My aunt is a prime example because she does not spend enough time with her son, leading to his addiction of playing video games and spending a large sum of money into the virtual world. To possess money for his game characters, he, one day, robbed a middle-aged woman with her baby on her hand, making the baby fall down and die. Therefore, had my aunt been more closed to my cousin and taken care of him more seriously, she would have noticed the problem in the first place and may have had a chance to stop this tragedy from happening.

Parents who are skillful in parenting can also form a positive attitude into children's mind. In fact, parents without good parenting skills may not know how to filter crime-related contents from what students consume every day. These violent and criminal scene from a certain movie can stimulate students' curiosity and eventually lead them to do it because they think it is cool. In the long run, children may perceive that the world is full of violence and bad people and committing crimes may be a plausible solution popping in their head when they face challenges in their life. Good parents can protect their children from these harmful sources by altering them with stories of moral lessons

In conclusion, parenting skills are of vital importance for parents to reduce youth crimes.