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ADVANTAGES & DISADVANTAGES of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.

It is believed that people can live longer and have more life expectancy is the result of ameliorated medical care. In my opinion the advantages is outweigh the disdvantages.

On the one hand, there are some disadvantages of this development. Firstly, the government have to spend a lot of money. They have to upgrade the infrastructure and new equipments to improve medical. Also we have to pay more money to educate more doctors and nurses because the elder need to took care of by medical team. So the result of disadvantage is rasing taxes, it brings more pressure to social and young people who is working. Secondly, people are living longer and raising life expectancy is the reason why population is older. Aging population bring demerits to business because we don’t have good qualified labor resource. Nowaday, in many countries have aging population such as Canada, they have immigrant policy to improve the econimic recession in their country. Unfortunately, the native peope is inferior in number because of the import of foreigners.

However, improved medical care given above can be considered from the opposite angle. The elder can enjoy their life. When people were young, they needed more time to concentrate on their work. So at the retirement, they will travel everywhere they woud like or they can particiate in unpaid work such as volunteer . These activities make them happier. And at that time, the elder have more time for their family which they missed in the past. They can teach soft skills for their children and give them some valuable experience. In addition, the elder can support their children when they are baby without parents. For example, in Viet Nam culture, young people usually imply their parents who in reteirement age, to look after their children.

In conclusion, I am convinced that ameliorated medical care is have more advantagous than disdvantagous to increase life expectancy and people can living longer.