Writing Task 2 - My first time

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Buying things on the internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?Thanks to the development of the internet, nowadays, we can buy things online without getting out of our houses. There is some pros, however, we can still see some cons in buying things online, and I will discuss both side of this right now.More and more people use all kinds of shopping platform to buy stuffs, such as amazon and ebay, which is really convenient and they treat shopping online as a sort of stress-relieving. Instead of going out on these day, especially those days we have to isolate yourselves from society due to covid 19, online shopping apps is the most needed and used platform. When you order a thing from these online platform, you have a lots options with all kinds of price from the highest to the lowest. Moreover, you can have access to the world-wide groceries online instead of going to the local convenient store with limited things you can buy. Additionally, there is a review section from the one buying it before, before you decide whether to buy it or not.However, I still believe there is some disadvantages of shopping in that way. Shopping online is so risky. We don’t know what is actually in that box delivered to us until we pay the fee and open that box. We can have a refund but the progress is so long and slow with so many actions needed to confirm if the refund is true. For instance, we buy a shirt or a dress online, but turns out, it doesn’t suit you at all. What would you do? Return it and get the refund? I don’t think so. In term of clothing, we should go to the store ourselves and try things on.Though, there is still some disadvantages but I believe if we buy things online wisely, we can take advantage of those platform and save a lot of time which we can you for many golden opportunities.I'm truly sorry. I didn't notice that I didn't log in. I'm really sorry, and this won't ever happen again. Thank you.

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AlpheccaStars · Answer

Thanks to the ~~development of~~ the internet, nowadays, we can buy things online without leaving ~~getting~~ ~~out of~~ our houses. There is (subject/ verb mismatch) some pros, (Comma splice error. ungrammatical sentence. https://www.chompchomp.com/terms/commasplice.htm

) however, we can still see some cons in buying things online, ~~and I will discuss both side of this right now.~~

(The reader knows you are going to present the pros and cons. That is the entire objective of the essay and your thesis statement. It is poor style to announce this. You need a thesis statement that is stronger.

e.g.

Although there are pros, such as convenience, there are still several problems associated with online purchases.

That is all you need. The reader is now primed to read your argument points.

)

More and more people use all kinds of shopping platform (wrong form) to buy stuffs, wrong usage) such as amazon and ebay, (wrong punctuation) which is really convenient. ~~and~~ They treat shopping online as a sort of stress~~-relieving~~. reliever. Instead of going out on these day, (wrong form) especially those days when we have to isolate yourselves (wrong word) from society due to covid 19, online shopping apps is the most needed and used platform. (wrong word Also the previous sentences is incorrectly constructed. The subject must be "we", not "apps".

Instead of going out these days, especially now when we have to isolate ourselves from society due to Covid-19, we can use online shopping apps on our smartphones or computers.

.)

When you order something ~~a thing~~ from these online platform, (wrong form) you have a lots options (wrong usage) with all kinds of price (wrong form) from the highest to the lowest. Moreover, you can have access to the world-wide (wrong word ) groceries online instead of going to the local convenient (wrong word) store with limited things you can buy. Additionally, there is a review section from the one (wrong form) buying it before, before you decide whether to buy it or not.

However, I still believe there is some disadvantages of shopping in that way. Shopping online is so very risky. We don’t know what is actually in that box delivered to us until we pay for it ~~the fee~~ and open that box. We can ~~have~~ get a refund but the progress is so long and slow with so many actions needed to confirm if that our complaint is legitimate. the ~~refund is true.~~ For instance, we buy a shirt or a dress online, but it turns out that it doesn’t suit you at all. What would you do? Return it and get the refund? I don’t think so. In term of clothing, we should go to the store ourselves and try things on.

Though, there is still some disadvantages but I believe if we buy things online wisely, we can take advantage of those platform and save a lot of time which we can you for many golden opportunities. (That makes no sense.)

AlpheccaStars · Answer

Tien Nguyen MinhI'm truly sorry. I didn't notice that I didn't log in. I'm really sorry, and this won't ever happen again. Thank you.

There is nothing to be sorry about!

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