WRITING TASK 2 -MORDEN LIFE

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Hi guys, below is my essay on task 2 writing, hope you spend your time reading and giving me some comments, thanks ~~

Topic: some people believe that the fast pace and stress of modern life is having a negative effect on families. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Many people feel that family life is being adversely impacted by the rapid rate and pressure off today’s busy life. To totally agree with this opinion because the fast speed leads to less time for families to be together, and stress puts a strain on relationship between family members.

The main reason why I believe family life being harmed is because families have less time to be with each other. As individual family members spend most of their time working and going out with their friends, they have little or no time to spend with their family. Besides, people have many things they have to do these days such as checking mail, playing games, and surfing the internet which means less time is left for family life. Taking my case as an example, I often have to work while I spend my weekend having coffee with my friends or staying at home to do some stuff like watching film or listening to music instead of chatting and watching tv in living room with my family as in the past.

In addition, the pressure of modern living prompt family relationship to become tense. Under the burden of like these days, people often is in stressful conditions which raise argument among the members. This is owing to the fact that people are exhausted by the work and so they are always irritable and easily provoked. For example, a husband will feel angry and be mad at his wife because their house is messy when he should help with the household chores.

In conclusion, I completely believe that the hurried life style and stressful environment of contemporary life have detrimental impacts on family relationships. This is because family members have less time for their family and when they are together, they feel less relaxed. Given this situation, it seems that the members should try to be more supportive to one another and also parents need to set aside regular times for families to relax together.

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Hoa`i Ba?oTopic: some people believe that the fast pace and stress of modern life is having a negative effect on families. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Please copy the instructions accurately.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

You wrote over 330 words. The minimum is 250. You will not lose points for writing more; however, longer essays generally do not get high scores. There are many reasons.

First, the longer the essay, the more chances you have to make errors, and you will lose points for these errors.

Second, your writing may be repetitious and wordy. This will cost you points.

Third, you will likely stray off-topic, and examiners will deduct points if you are not focused on the topic. You will also be tempted to use weak or unsound arguments or even contradict yourself.

Fourth, you will take a lot of time writing, and not have time left over to proofread your essay. You will miss the silly mistakes, and that lowers your score.

Fifth, you will not have enough time to spend on Task 1, and get a lower score there.

Aim for an essay length of 270-290.

Many people feel that family life is being adversely impacted by the rapid rate (wrong word) and pressure off (wrong word) today’s busy life. To (wrong word) totally agree with this opinion because the fast speed leads to less time for families to be together, and stress puts a strain on relationships between family members.

The main reason ~~why I believe~~ (Just present your argument. Do not write "I believe" in the body paragraphs. Put that in the introduction and conclusion.) family life being harmed is because families have less time to be with each other. As Individual family members spend most of their time working and going out with their friends, not at home with family. ~~they have little or no time to spend with their family~~. Besides, people have many things they have to do these days such as checking mail, playing games, and surfing the internet ~~which means less time is left for family life~~. (Repetitive. This is the third time you have written this idea.) Taking my case as an example, I often have to work late while I spend my weekend having coffee with my friends or staying at home ~~to do some stuff~~ where I am occupied with ~~like~~ watching films or listening to music instead of chatting and watching TV in the living room with my family as I did in the past.

In addition, the pressure of modern living ~~promp~~t causes family relationships to become tense. Under the burden of pressure to earn money to pay for a high standard of living, ~~like these days,~~ people often is (wrong form) in stressful conditions which raise (wrong form) argument (wrong form) among the members. This is owing to the fact that people are exhausted by the work and so they are always irritable and easily provoked. For example, a husband will feel angry and be mad at his wife because their house is messy when he should help with the household chores.

In conclusion, I completely believe that the hurried life style and stressful environment of contemporary life have detrimental impacts on family relationships. This is because family members have less time for their family and when they are together, they feel less relaxed. ~~Given this situation, it seems that the members should try to be more supportive to one another and also parents need to set aside regular times for families to relax together~~. (The essay topic did not ask for a solution, so do not provide one.)

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