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Please check my essay! Thank a lot.Toppic: In some schools, wearing uniforms is demanded. Some others believe that students have the right to wear whatever clothes they wish. Discuss both views and give your opinion.People have diffrent viewa about choose wear in school. While some people beleive that wearing uniforms is compulsory, others believe that studebt have select what to wear to school.On the one hand, it is widely believe that uniform is necessary for students to wear school uniforms. School uniforms help distinguish students for other peopel. We can identify who are studebts or not at school oven outside school if they are wearing uniforms. Moreover, school uniform make students feel proud of their school. For example, if there is a meeting and they are required to connect with students from many different school, wearing school uniforms help student feel more confident, and they participate in activities voluntarily with high efforts to demonstrade their school is good.On the other hand, some people think that school uniforms is not really good for students. School uniform prevents students from expressing themselve, it can make them feel uncomfortable, and they don't want to be seen the same as all the student.In conclusion, wearing school uniforms has both positive and negative. In my opinion, wearing school uniforms feel proud of because it is the symbol of their school

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1) The task asks for 'at least 250 words, but your word count is 194 words. This will result in an automatic downgrade by one whole band. It may also affect the score for Task Achievement, as there is not enough development and explanations.

2) There are quite a number of spelling errors. Perhaps this is your typing, but in the exam this might drop your vocabulary score to Band 5, which states: "may make noticeable errors in spelling and/or word formation that may cause some difficulty for the reader". These are highlighted in yellow.

3) Grammar mistakes are highlighted in red. Quite a few are to do with singular/plural and subject verb agreement.

4) Maybe you could come up with more ideas or explanations, particularly for the second paragraph, which needs expansion and development, and maybe examples. Did you have to wear a uniform, or do you know people who did? What effect did it have?

Here are some quotes from the Web, which would presumably form part of a Band 9 essay:

"Yet there is no robust evidence that introducing a school uniform will, by itself, improve the academic results, behaviour or attendance of pupils. The summary of studies from around the world in the Sutton Trust-EEF Toolkit finds the average impact is zero. For every school that has succeeded in raising attainment by introducing a uniform policy, another has failed."

"Yet schoolwear may have some benefits. It removes competition and comparison between students about their clothes and the latest fashions. It also supplies an image of equality."

https://opinionfront.com/are-school-uniforms-good-or-bad-idea

It would help if you read some articles about this issue on the web first to familiarize yourself with the issues and vocabulary, and then came back to the topic some time later. Do bear in mind that examiners are looking for topic vocabulary, as opposed to general - purpose vocabulary, as topic vocabulary suggests that you have a wider range. Therefore reading around common IELTS topics is an essential part of preparation.

5) In general, if you are wishing to achieve a Band 7 score, there is much work to be done on your general English skills first, rather than bothering with exam practice at this stage.

People have diffrent viewa about choose wear in school. While some people beleive that wearing uniforms is compulsory, others believe that studebt have select what to wear to school.

On the one hand, it is widely believe that uniform is necessary for students to wear school uniforms [inchoherent]. School uniforms help distinguish students for other peopel. We can identify who are studebts or not at school oven outside school if they are wearing uniforms. Moreover, school uniform make students feel proud of their school. For example, if there is a meeting and they are required to connect with students from many different school, wearing school uniforms help student feel more confident, and they participate in activities voluntarily with high efforts to demonstrade their school is good.

On the other hand, some people think that school uniforms is not really good for students. School uniform prevents students from expressing themselve, it can make them feel uncomfortable, and they don't [Do not use short forms in formal writing.] want to be seen the same as all the student.

In conclusion, wearing school uniforms has both positive and negative [needs a noun here]. In my opinion, wearing school uniforms feel proud of because it is the symbol of their school

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