Writing task 2

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Topic: Some people think that students who don’t take a break in studies between the high school and the university are at disadvantaged compared to students who travel and work after high school before further continuing their education. Do you agree or disagree?

Due to the increasing of the unemployment rate of graduated students from universities nowadays, it is true to said that the majority of these students come to universities as soon as they complete high school. Therefore, they seemed to have fewer benefits than the students who spend time for travelling and working before universities. This essay will discuss about the advantages the students who has continuous studies loose (group A) in comparison with others who take gap year (group B).

First of all, it can be seen that the knowledge that school given is only theory and theory. Though the students are able to be of probation in the third year, this short-time experiences certainly won’t be enough for work requirement. Thus, they need time and money to keep up the perfect job accomplishment. Reversely, group B are totally well-prepared since they get plenty of basic skills.

Besides that, group A tends to meet more difficulties even if they got job acceptance. It is necessary for training new employees from group A as their practical skills’ deficiency. In term of business, the employers have to make sure that they won’t be put at greatest disadvantage in case their employees may leave the companies after training. A common solution for this problem is to take money from these trained employees’ salary. On the other hand, after gap year, group B then finish their education with the same certificate as another. In addition of practical experiences, they satisfy the job offer by far.

To sum up, my point of view is entirely the same as the idea from the topic. Nowadays students must have not only knowledge, but also experiences and skills as three most essential factors of succeed in job.