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WRITING TASK 1: The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web.

The given line graph illustrates the amount of visitors to two new music platforms including Pop Parade and Music Choice during the period of 15 days.

As can be seen from the graph, the number of visitors of both music sites fluctuates significantly. Especially, the proportion of visitors to Pop Parade witnesses the highest proportion most of the days.

In the first day, Pop Parade music websites had around 120 thousand visitors, while there was about 40 thousand guests for Music Choice websites. No longer after that, there was a dramatic dip in Pop Parade websites from nearly 120 thousand visitors in day 3 to below 40 thousand visitors in day 7. Similarly, a slight drop was also seen in Music Choice by 20 thousand visitors at the same time.

In contrast, the day 14 witnessed a considerable growth in Pop Parade music platforms and reached 160 thousand visitors while the other reached its peak to over 120 thousand visitors. In the last day, Pop Parade's visitors was the highest number with over 170 thousand over the period shown. In contrast, Music Choice websites declined rapidly from over 120 thousand guests to below 80 thousand visitors.

  

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The given line graph illustrates the amount of visitors to two new music platforms including Pop Parade and Music Choice during the period of 15 days.

As can be seen from the graph, the number of visitors of both music sites fluctuates significantly. Especially, the proportion of visitors to Pop Parade witnesses the highest proportion most of the days.

In the first day, Pop Parade

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