[WRITING TASK 1] PLEASE HELP ME WITH MY ESSAY, THANK YOU VERY MUCH!!

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The maps indicate several dramatic changes in the island before and after being constructed for tourism purpose.

Overall, a lot of facilities were built while most of the trees were remained. Moreover, a new pier was constructed to give access for tourists to the island by boat.

The original island was completely undeveloped with some trees mainly locating in the eastern and western side of the island. After being reforming, two separated accommodation areas were constructed around circular footpath. Each of the accomodation can be entered though a footpath. The accomodation area in the west was connected with another footpath leading the beach, which converted for swimming purpose.

In addition, a pier with T-shaped was formed at the southern edge of the island. Moreover, a vehicle track was constructed to link the pier with a reception locating at center part of the island, leading to north to reach the restaurant.

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

The maps (How many maps? ) indicate (Not good. Read my advice for the best verbs) several dramatic changes in the island before and after being constructed (Nobody built this island. The island is natural, build by nature.. Sometimes people construct islands, such as the artificial resort islands in Abu Dhabi, but this is not the case here.). ~~for tourism purpose~~. (Do not write reasons or purposes. ust describe the figures.)

Overall, a lot of facilities were built while most of the trees were left in place. ~~were remained.~~ (wrong verb form.) Moreover, a new pier was constructed to give access for tourists to the island by boat.

The ~~original~~ island was completely undeveloped with some trees mainly locating (wrong verb form.) in the eastern and western side of the island. After being reforming, (wrong verb form. Also, "reform" is for people, mainly juvenile delinquents and criminals )two ~~separated~~ separate accommodation areas were constructed around circular footpath. (wrong form.) Each of the accomodation (wrong form.) can be entered though (wrong word.) a footpath. The accomodation area in the west was connected with another footpath leading to the beach, which converted (wrong verb form.) for swimming purpose. (No new paragraph) In addition, a T-shaped pier ~~with T-shaped~~ was formed (wrong word.) at the southern edge of the island. Moreover, a vehicle track was constructed to link the pier with a reception locating (wrong verb form.) at the center ~~part~~ of the island, leading to north to ~~reach~~ the restaurant.

Your essay was barely the minimum word count. Aim for 170-190 words for Task 1.

You need to study and practice verbs and verb forms.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

Sample essay (~185 words)

The first map shows a small uninhabited low-lying island about 230 meters long (east-west) by 50 to 80 meters wide (north-south). The second map shows this island after its development.

The undeveloped island has a small beach on the western end, and a site suitable for a pier on the south coast. There are a few palm trees growing, but otherwise, the island is empty.

After development, many visitor facilities can be seen. There is a pier for boats to discharge passengers and supplies. The reception building is about twenty meters from the pier, and behind it, a restaurant. To the east and west of the reception, there are accommodations, in the form of huts. The east section has nine huts, and the west has five. Footpaths are laid out between the huts, the beach, the restaurant and reception. A vehicular track circles the reception building, allowing access to the pier and restaurant. Vacationers can use the beach on the western end for swimming. The eastern end of the island, about a third of the island's area, has not been developed.

Become familiar with compass directions so you can use them to describe positions, both absolute and relative, on maps.

Vocabulary:

inhabitant - a person living in a place
habitable - a place where people are able to live
uninhabitable - land where is is not possible for people to live (e.g. a desert)
uninhabited - no people live there.

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