Writing task 1: line graph

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Task: The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The line chart illustrates the percentage of people aged 65 and over in three different nations over a course of 100 years starting from 1940.

As can be seen from this chart, it is clearly evident that the proportion of elderly people go up in each country over the time frame. Japan is anticipated to observe the most dramatic shifts in its elderly population.

At the beginning of the period, the percentage of population aged 65 and more in USA registered the highest of all three, standing at nearly 10%. This figure rose gradually to approximately 15% in 1990. A similar trend could be seen in the proportion of elder;y people in Sweden, as it increased considerably from 7,5% to nearly 15% over a 50-year period starting from 1940. However, from 1990 to 2030, while the percentage of elderly people in USA has remain relatively unchanged , hovering around nearly 15%, that of Sweden has fluctuated significantly, standing at 17% by 2030. In 2040, this number of USA and Sweden are expected to climb to about 25% and 23% respectively.

Over a course of 60 years starting from 1940, the proportion of elderly people in Japan stabled at below 5%. However, this number has jumped dramatically. In 2040, it is thought to jump to approximately 27%.

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

I can't see the graph below; there is none.

Please attach an image of the figure you are writing about.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

The line chart (There is no such thing as a line chart. There are pie charts and bar charts.) ~~illustrates~~ plots the percentage of people aged 65 and over in three different nations over a course of 100 years starting from 1940.

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~~As can be seen from this chart, it is clearly evident~~ ~~that~~ (Only write about the data.) the proportion of elderly (People age 65 are not considered elderly.) people go up in each country over the time frame. Japan is anticipated to observe the most dramatic shifts in its elderly population.

At the beginning of the period, the percentage of population aged 65 and more in USA registered the highest of all three, standing at nearly 10%. This ~~figure~~ rose gradually to approximately 15% in 1990. A similar trend could be seen in ~~the proportion of elder;y people~~ in Sweden, as it increased considerably from 7,5% to nearly 15% over a the 50-year period starting from 1940. However, from 1990 to 2030, while the percentage of elderly people in USA has remain relatively unchanged , hovering around nearly 15%, that of Sweden has ~~fluctuated~~ varied significantly, standing at 17% by 2030. In 2040, this number of USA and Sweden are expected to climb to about 25% and 23% respectively.

Over a course of 60 years starting from 1940, the proportion of elderly people in Japan stabled at below 5%. However, this number has jumped dramatically. In 2040, it is projected to rise ~~thought to jump~~ to approximately 27%.

These graphs show cyclical and random fluctuation:

Notice the shapes of the curves on your graph:

Japan:

Between 1940 and 1985, the proportion of the oldest segment of the population declined 50%, from 5% to 2.5%, most of it occurring in the first two decades. This changed to an exponentially rising pattern after 1985, which is projected to continue to 2030, when it reaches 25%. Between 2030 and 2040, an additional 2% rise is expected.

Sweden:

The data in Sweden shows a linear upward trend of about 1.8% per year, starting at 7% in 1940, and ending at 25% in 1940. However, there are deviations of +2 and - 4% from the best fit straight line drawn through the data. For example, where a straight-line fit would give 21% in 2023, the actual value is predicted to be 18%.

USA:

The USA data is best described in three time periods, an approximately linear increase from 1948-1980 at a rate of 0.15% per year, a period of a decline of 1% from 1980-2020, followed by an exponential increase to 2040. The ending value is predicted to be about 23%.

Anonymous · Answer

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