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WRITING TASK 1 ESSAY- THE QUALITY OF THE PICTURE IS NOT SO GOOD.-.



The given chart illustrates the number of people allergic to four different types of food throughout the year. Overall, while those with peanuts and milk allergies decreased from quarter 1 to quarter 4, the others fluctuated with an upward trend. The number of peanuts allergy sufferers topped others in Quarter 1, whereas by quarter four, the figure for milk had risen and was the highest.
At the beginning of the period, people suffering from peanuts allergy peaked at about 33000 before plummeted to around 7000 and reached a low of just over 5000 in the first three quarters. Similarly, there was a drop in the number of people allergic to milk. However, the figure subsequently rose and ended just above 20000 and was the highest in quarter four.
In contrast, eggs and wheat gluten allergic sufferers mirrored each other with both increased slightly. Nevertheless, while those with eggs allergy sharply dropped, there was a slight fall in the figure for wheat and gluten between quarters 2 and 3. After that, both figures grew and were equal to the number suffering from peanuts allergy by the end of quarter four.

  

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Some small points first. "Peanut allergy" (not "peanuts allergy") because "peanut" is being used as an adjective here, not a noun with plurals and singulars. " Also, since I cannot read the chart, I will have to assume what the data for the four allergies shows.

— Doctor D

  • Some small points first.
  • "Peanut allergy" (not "peanuts allergy") because "peanut" is being used as an adjective here, not a noun with plurals and singulars.
  • " Also, since I cannot read the chart, I will have to assume what the data for the four allergies shows.
  • I prefer putting a space between paragraphs if the paragraphs are not indented.
  • Put commas when giving figures (American usage: 3000 + 3,000).
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Some small points first. "Peanut allergy" (not "peanuts allergy") because "peanut" is being used as an adjective here, not a noun with plurals and singulars. Same with "egg" vs "eggs."

Also, since I cannot read the chart, I will have to assume what the data for the four allergies shows.

I prefer putting a space between paragraphs if the paragraphs are not indente

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