Writing task 1 - bar chart

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The given charts illustrate the number of the UK tourists visit America and the US visitors to the UK in the first graph and their spending patterns in the second graph from 2011 to 2015.

Overall, British visitors to the US were more than US visitors and the spending of them was higher as well.

Base on the first chart’s data, it is clear that the number of UK tourists was more than America toursits and had some slight shifts around 3000 to 3500 but it still remained oustripping the US. After witnessed a sharp fluctuation and hit the lowest point at 2500 visitors in 2013, it then ascended considerably to about 3200 visitors in 2015.

In the second graph, British tourist spent more amount of money than American did. While the US visitors spending patterns was relatively flat at approximately 3000 million dollars between 2011 and 2013 then had a gradual increase after 2013, the UK visitors shoot up continually and peaked at 6000 million dollars in 2015.

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Please read my advice for Task 1 essays.

IELTS TASK 1: Hints, Tips And Advice

Vocabulary Words For Task 1: Reference Post

The ~~given~~ (What kind of charts? How many?) charts illustrate (Wrong verb. Use "illustrate" for figures that have pictures such as maps or diagrams. Use "plot, give or compare" for mathematical plots and graphs.) the number of the UK tourists visit America (Ungrammatical. "The UK tourists visit America" is a main clause, a sentence. It is ungrammatical for a sentence to be the object of a preposition.) and the US visitors to the UK in the first graph (wrong word. ) and their spending ~~patterns~~ in the second graph (wrong word. ) from 2011 to 2015.

Overall, there were more British visitors to the US ~~were more~~ than US visitors to the UK and their spending ~~of them~~ was higher as well. (You need one more main observation for this paragraph. One sentence is not enough.) The amount spent by both groups increased, but the amount of increase was higher for the UK tourists.

~~Base on the first chart’s data, it is clear that~~ (The reader knows that you are writing about the first chart, which has numbers. Those words tell the reader nothing about the data.) The number of UK tourists was more than America (wrong form) toursits and had some slight variations ~~shifts~~ around 3000 (wrong number) to 3500 (wrong number) ~~but it still remained oustripping the US~~. After witnessed (wrong word, ungrammatical) a sharp fluctuation (wrong word. You cannot see fluctuations on a bar chart with only a few data points. Read my advice on vocabulary words.) and hit the lowest point at 2500 (wrong number) visitors in 2013, it then rose ~~ascended~~ ~~considerably~~ to about 3200 (wrong number) visitors in 2015.

~~In the second graph,~~ British tourist (wrong form) spent more ~~amount of~~ money than American (wrong form) did. While the US visitors spending ~~patterns~~ was relatively flat at approximately 3000 million dollars between 2011 and 2013, it then had a gradual increase after 2013, (wrong punctuation End of sentence.) the UK visitors shoot up (wrong word) continually and peaked (wrong word. There is no peak on either chart.) at 6000 million (six billion) dollars in 2015.

This example is way too long for an IELTS Task 1 essay, but it gives you ideas of observations, sentences and vocabulary that you can use for these two bar charts.

The two bar charts compare trips by tourists from the UK to the United States to trips by tourists from the United States to the UK from 2011 to 2015. The first chart plots the numbers of tourists in each category in each year, and the second chart plots now much they spent on their trips.

Overall, there were more British visitors to the US than US visitors to the UK and their spending was higher as well. The amount spent by both groups increased, but the amount of increase was higher for the UK tourists.

The number of UK tourists ranged between 2900 and 3500 thousand during the period. Starting at about 3250 thousand in 2011, there was a slight dip in 2013 when it reached the lowest point. In contrast, the numbers of American tourists were smaller than their UK counterparts in every year, but they had a larger variation, ranging between 2500 and 3200 thousand. The low point was in 2013, at two and a half million. At that time the difference between the numbers in both groups was the greatest, nearly 400 thousand.

In terms of the spending, the amounts for the UK tourists were higher than their American counterparts by 25% or more in each year. They increased continuously, even from 2012 to 2013 when the number of tourists was the lowest. And between 2013 and 2015 the change was significant, nearly 50%, rising from 4 to 5.8 billion dollars. During these two years, the corresponding numbers of visitors went up by only 7%. The largest difference was between the two groups was in 2015, a little less than 2 billion dollars. The amount spent by US tourists did not change much between 2011 and 2013. It was at a minimum in the same year that the number of tourists was the lowest, 2013, at about 2.8 billion dollars. From 2013 to 2015, the rise was about 15%, from 3.5 to 4 billion dollars. That was the same percentage gain as in the number of visitors.

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