Writing task 1 - Bar chart

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The table below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. (The y axis shows numbers of prisoners in thousands).

The bar chart illustrates the number of people in prison in five different countries from 1930 to 1980.

Overall, the proportion of prisoners in 5 countries fluctuated. The figures for the US and Canada were highest.

There was a dramatic increase in the number of prisoners in the US. It was from 100 thousands in 1930 and then reached a peak of nearly 140 thousands. The figure for United States was highest almost all time surveyed. The rate of imprisonment in Canada decreased sharply . This proportion exactly 120 thousands fell to about 90 thousands between 1930 and 1980, a decrease of about 30 thousands in 50 years.

Great Britain saw a significant rise in the number of people in prison. In 1930, which accounted for the smallest part about 30 thousands before reaching the highest point at over 80 thousands in 1980. The figures for the prison population in Australia and New Zealand fluctuated between over 40 thousands and 100 thousands. In 1970, the number of prisoners in Great Britain, Australia and New Zealand were the same, at around 65 thousands.

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The bar chart ~~illustrates~~ shows the number of people in prison in five different countries (which countries?) from 1930 to 1980.

Overall, the proportion (wrong word. "Proportion is a value that is always less than or equal to one. Are the numbers on the chart less than 1?) of prisoners in 5 countries fluctuated. (wrong word. Also, this statement is rather silly, because no one would expect that the prison population would be constant over a period of fifty years in five different countries. It's like saying, "The weather changes.") The numbers ~~figures~~ for the US and Canada were highest. (When? Be more specific. This does not tell the reader much.)

There was a dramatic increase in the number of prisoners in the US. It was (wrong word) from 100 thousands (wrong form) in 1930 and then reached a peak (wrong word.) of nearly 140 thousands. (when?) The numbers ~~figure~~ for United States was highest almost all time surveyed. (When? How do you know it was a survey?) The rate (wrong word. The chart does not show imprisonment rates. A rate of imprisonment would be expressed like this: 45 people out of every 10,000. ) of imprisonment in Canada decreased sharply . This proportion exactly 120 thousands fell to about 90 thousands between 1930 and 1980, a decrease of about 30 thousands in 50 years.

Great Britain saw a significant rise in the number of people in prison. In 1930, which accounted for the smallest part about 30 thousands before reaching the highest point at over 80 thousands in 1980. The figures for the prison population in Australia and New Zealand fluctuated (wrong word) between over 40 thousands ("Over 40 thousand" is not good. A million is over 40,000. The reader does not know how much over 40 thousand you are talking about.) and 100 thousands. In 1970, the number of prisoners in Great Britain, Australia and New Zealand were the same, at around 65 thousands.

Fluctuation: Fluctuation is a very rapid change with many ups and downs. You cannot see fluctuations on a bar chart because there are not enough time points. Instead use the verbs "vary" or "change" or the nouns "change" and "variation." Use "fluctuation" when you see this kind of pattern on line graphs:

Peak: This means a distinct maximum point on a graph. You have to see both sides of a peak. The values must be lower both before and after the peak.

Writing task 1 - Bar chart

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