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The graph below shows the proportions of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.  The line graph demonstrates the percentages of four different recycled materials namely Paper & cardboard, Glass containers, Aluminum cans, and Plastic between 1982 and 2010 in an unnamed country. Overall, it can be seen from the graph that the general trend was upward. All figures remained stable ranking during the period and witnessed a dramatic increase except for the Paper & cardboard. Looking at the graph in more detail, the average recycling rate of Paper & cardboard increased significantly from 65% and peaked at 80% in 1990 while the proportion of recycled Glass containers witnessed a remarkable decrease to 40%. After increasing, Paper & cardboard sharply decreased to 70%, but it occupied the highest place compared to Glass containers recovered to 60% in 2010. By contrast, Aluminum appeared on the chart in 1986 at 5% while Plastics were recycled by the unnamed country beginning in 1990 with approximately 3%. There was a large difference between each other as Aluminum witnessed a nine times rise throughout the period at 45%, but Plastics climbed up slowly and got approximately 8% at the end of the period.

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The line graph ~~demonstrates~~ (Not a good word here. read my advice about these verbs to use) plots / compares / shows / gives the percentages of four different ~~recycled~~ materials that were recycled, namely Paper & cardboard, Glass containers, Aluminum cans, and Plastic between 1982 and 2010 in an unnamed country.

Overall, ~~it can be seen from the graph that~~ (Those are useless, meaningless "filler" words. It conveys no information to the reader.) the general trend was upward. All ~~figures~~ (wrong word. Read my advice about misused vocabulary words.) remained stable ranking over the period (That is not correct reporting. In 18982, two of them had no data at all, thus no ranking in that year.) ~~and witnessed~~ (wrong word. Numbers cannot see, experience or witness anything. they have no eyes or brains. Read my advice about misused vocabulary words.) a dramatic increase (incorrect reporting. A change from 65% to 70% is not even close to "dramatic.") except for the Paper & cardboard.

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Overall, two of the materials (paper and glass) were recycled from the start; aluminum began in 1986 and plastics in 1990. The earlier that recycling of a material began, the higher its rates were. Throughout the entire interval, paper had the highest percentages and glass was second. After 1990, they were followed by aluminum and plastics.

Looking at the graph in more detail, (Those are useless, meaningless "filler" words. It conveys no information to the reader. Read my advice on these "filler" expressions.) the average recycling rate of Paper & cardboard increased ~~significantly~~ from 65% and peaked at 80% in 1990 (incorrect reporting. The peak was in 1994; there was a dip at 1990.) while ~~the proportion~~ that of ~~recycled~~ Glass containers ~~witnessed a remarkable decrease~~ fell from 50% to 40% from 1982 to 1990. ~~After increasing~~, (incoherent ) From 1994, Paper & cardboard ~~sharply~~ decreased by 10% to 70%, but it was always larger ~~occupied the highest place compared~~ (awkward, unnatural) to [ Glass containers recovered to 60% in 2010.] (The words in the blue brackets make a sentence, or main clause. It is ungrammatical to make such a clause the object of a preposition. This is incomprehensible English. Yu need to write much more logically and clearly.)

By contrast, Aluminum appeared on the chart in 1986 at 5% while Plastics were recycled ~~by the unnamed country~~ (This us useless trivia. You already told the reader about the location in the first paragraph.) beginning in 1990 at ~~with~~ approximately 3%. ~~There was a large difference between each other~~ (that makes no sense) as Aluminum recycling rose by a factor of nine during ~~witnessed a nine times rise~~ ~~throughout~~ the period at to finish at 45%, but Plastics ~~climbed~~ went up slowly ~~and got~~ ending at approximately 8% ~~at the end of the period~~.

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Sample essay:

The graph compares the recycling rates of four categories of materials, (paper & cardboard, glass containers, aluminum cans and plastic) during the period from 1982 to 2010.

Overall, two of the materials (paper and glass) were recycled from the start; aluminum began in 1986 and plastics in 1990. The earlier that recycling of a material began, the higher its rates were. Throughout the entire interval, paper had the highest percentages and glass was second. After 1990, they were followed by aluminum and lastly, plastics.

In detail, the majority of paper was recycled, although its rate peaked in 1994 at 80% and it began a slow decline thereafter to 70% in 2010. For glass, half or more was recycled in both 1982 and all the years after 1994. There was a dip in its curve from 50% to 40% from 1982 to 1990. In contrast to paper, it rose slowly from 1994 onwards, ending at 60%. Aluminum showed the greatest rise, as it went up continuously between 1986 (5%) and 2010 (45%). Plastic was the latecomer but, like aluminum, went up over time. However, its rate of increase was very slow and it never achieved a percentage higher than 9%.

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