WRITING TASK 1

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Given are the table comparing the proportion of major kinds of residing in three areas in two years 2001 and 2006. Overall, a slight change in the rates of residential preferences was witnessed in all four dimensions in the period of five years.

It is clear that people liked living in house most in all kinds of places, making up over 60 percent of all three areas. However, house only became more popular in Tasmania, increasing up to nearly 90 percent but in the rest two regions, percentage of people choosing house slightly decreased. By contrast, semi-attached house attracted at least 1 percent more than the figures in 2001, compared to these in 2006.

Besides, flat and other saw reversed patterns in Victoria and Tasmania, rising in Victory and dipping in Tasmania all 1 percent. Finally, those two sectors had the same number of people dwelling in 2006 (11%) though in 2001 only 8% of people chose to live in apartment.

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

You need a lot more practice with Task 1. In Task 1, you have to describe the figure, graph or table without drawing conclusions. This is best done in three paragraphs: an introduction, overall features, and then some details. Most of your phrases are unnatural, and you use many incorrect vocabulary words.

Here is a model for this essay:

The table gives the percentages of dwelling types in three states of Australia: Victoria, Northern Territories, and Tasmania in two years, 2001 and 2006. Three main types are dwelling are listed, and there is an entry for "other." These types are: House, Semi-detached House, and Flat or Apartment.

Overall, the majority of dwellings were houses and semi-detached houses. These two types represented about 90% of the dwellings in Victoria and Tasmania and almost 80% in Northern Territories. An anomaly was the relatively high percentage of "other" dwellings in Northern Territories in 2001, being 14%, as compared to one or two percent in the other areas. There were relatively minor differences in the numbers between 2001 and 2006, with changes of one to three percentage points.

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Given are the table (Ungrammatical) comparing the proportion of major kinds of residing (wrong usage) in three areas (What are the areas?) in two years: 2001 and 2006. Overall, a slight change in the rates (wrong word) of residential preferences was witnessed in all four dimensions (wrong word) in the period of five years.

It is clear that people liked living (This is your opinion. Do not write opinions or conclusions in Task 1. That is for Task 2) in house most in all kinds of places, (??) making up over 60 percent of all three areas. However, house only became more popular in Tasmania, increasing up to nearly 90 percent but in the rest two regions, percentage of people choosing house (wrong usage) slightly decreased. By contrast, semi-attached house attracted (wrong word) at least 1 percent more than the figures in 2001, compared to these in 2006.

Besides, flat and other saw reversed patterns in Victoria and Tasmania, rising in Victory and dipping in Tasmania all 1 percent. Finally, those two sectors (wrong words) had the same number of people dwelling in 2006 (11%) though in 2001 only 8% of people chose to live in apartment.

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