Writing task 1

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The pie charts illustrate the different things which built successful in two age groups.

One of the biggest factor which created happy for people under 30 was Achievement at work. Achievement at work accounted for 31 percent of the total, while 14% of the other factors were lowest in the Qatar. The second factor belonged to doing hobbies, at 22 percent. The percentage of having a good appearance was 18 per cent, compared with travelling recorded in the chart.

At the age of up to 30, the value of achievement at work was higher than 4 other factors. More specifically, over 30 per cent of people who believed that blessedness came from Achievement at work. Just 10 percent of the other factors brought him or her to happiness in life. The activities of Doing hobbies and financial security which were two factors made happy for them (24 per cent and 20 percent respectively). There are followed by these which described the activities of being with family, at 14 percent.

Overall, the important activity of the two age groups which made happy was achievement in the office. Nevertheless, the activity of other factors which created comfortable for people was not popular.