WRITING PART 2. may i get some advices about my writing please? thank you in advance

• Write about the following topic.
• Many parents today organise extra classes for their children after school and at the weekends.
• Do you feel that this is a worthwhile thing to do or do you feel children have enough education at school?
• Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Extra classes are normal for children nowadays. Many kids have to attend classes from an early age because of their parents’ arrangement and still have to study additional courses throughout their study period. All parents want their children to be prepared for further education and career, and they think that extra classes are a great choice. While it is true that this may cause a stressful experience for some children, but as a student, I believe that classes after school will help the children to study easier on the main course, and will also improve other skills for students.

Most parents want to give their children extra classes because they want their children to study better at school. With the help of supplemental courses, students will have time to learn with guidance and carefully revise their work. Some people may have problems with working independently, or they may have questions about their lessons but have no time to ask; extra courses will solve these issues.

Moreover, additional classes are not restricted in the core subjects. Because of this, students can attend art, music or sports courses after school or at the weekends. Contrary to popular belief, supplemental classes are not stressful as it might seem. Not only are these great opportunities to hone one’s skills, but also a good time for students to relax after hours of studying at school.

In conclusion, it is undeniable that extra classes give a positive influence on students, as children will improve their study at school and also have a chance to broaden their horizons.