Writing my opinion based on an article.

hey guys , the reason why I created this thread is because I want to learn english while surfing this site .Im going to post some essay I wrote , and you guys can give any comments or critiques , correct me if there are miss used words , wrong grammars, better choice of words,prefixes etc.I want to find an article and write my opinion based from that article because I want to learn to write articles aswell .

Okay here's the first article

http://www.edarticle.com/article.php?id=835


here's my opinion

            'Would not "get it" that we must move to learn'. I find that this statement is very 

true, from my opinion, during in school specifically in classroom,students should not 

just sit on the chair all the time, moving around would definitely help, and I think 

teachers should stress this out if the students are not aware. 'Movement stimulates 

the growth of neural networks'. So, does jogging or running while learning means 

we learn more ? In my opinion, In order to do this, we could voice record our 

teacher lecturing or read out loud certain topics that you wish to learn and record it 

with a cellphone or mp3 player, then listen to it while you jog or run or even when 

you want to sleep. We cannot deny that children nowadays spend atleast 5 hours 

watching television including surfing the internet and play video games, it is a 

shame how parents not controlling their kids more strictly, parents must play an 

important role when comes to these type of problems, because when their children 

addicted especially to video games, it is pretty hard to go back. Be a teacher at 

home, it is a great idea to let children gain self confidence in early stage of their 

life. Teaching their parents as the author wrote, 'most students remember more 

information better when they talk, write or draw'. So, just provide them a white 

board and an erasable markers and start listening to your kids. Based from 

paragraph 8 that the author wrote, chewing gum could actually be an effective way 

to focus. Teachers should probably let their students have chewing gums or some 

candies as long as they keep their class tidy, by not throwing candy wrappers and 

spit gums everywhere.

-This is exactly how i wrote , including all the prefixes.