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question: it is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. however, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musican. discuss both these vies and give your own opinion

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The talents about sport, music, art will appear naturally when some certain people are born and other people can not have it. However, other people think that the talents about sport, music can be taught when we are a child. In my view, i agree with the idea about training on something for a long time will make people good at that field.

Some people was born with their natural talent like music, sport. It can be understood that if they do not do anything to improve their talent, they also can do it but not getting hight result. So, if they realize that they have a certain talent, spending time to improve it, they will get a higher result. For example, people with their music talent can sing a song greater than the one do not have talent about music. And when they train this talent everyday they will get more excellent than people train this field at the same time. So it will be perfect if they are born with a certain talent.

And for people do not have any talent when they are born. They also can have it if they try so hard, spending more time than everyone to achieve that. If they only focus on doing something they will make a miracle thing that they never think before. Ronaldo is a typical example for training so hard to be a top football player. He achieved many titles in his work by training himself everyday. And the percentage of people born with talent is always less than people not having any talent. So if they have motivation and effort or interest in something, try their best and not stopping to achieve the goal. The best result will always come with them. It does not the matter if we are born without talent, having interest and effort will make us stronger than others.

In conclusion, it will be good if we have some certain talent but do not think about having or not. Trying to train on something with the highest effort will make us get everything we want.