Writing IELTS task 1

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This is my essay for task 1 in the IELTS exam. Please check for some mistakes. Thanks!

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The two pie charts compare the percentage of the main energy sources for four different fuels in the USA from 1980 to 1990.

Overall, oil was the main energy source in the USA throughout the period. While most of the source of energy increased, except for natural gas, hydroelectric power still remained.

In 1980, the percentage of energy source for oil was the highest (42%). This then decreased sharply to 33% in 1990. There was a slight rise in the proportion of energy source for natural gas by 1%, from 26% in 1980 to 25% in 1990. Hydroelectric power was a sole energy source remaining the percentage of 5% from 1980 to 1990.

By contrast, there is a considerable increase in the proportion of energy sources for coal and nuclear power. The percentage of energy source for coal went up from 22% in 1980 to 27% in 1990. Only 5%, the percentage for nuclear power rose by 5% from 1980, then this reached the percentage of 10% in 1990.

Teechr · Accepted Answer

The two pie charts compare the percentages of the main energy sources ~~for~~ as represented by four different fuels in the USA ~~from~~ in the years1980 to and 1990. [ 1]

Overall, oil was the main energy source in the USA in both years, although its use decreased over the ten-year period. [ 1] ~~throughout the period.~~ Moreover, while ~~most of the source of energy~~ the figures representing coal and nuclear energy increased, ~~except~~ those for natural gas, and hydroelectric power saw little change. ~~still remained.~~

In 1980, the percentage of ~~energy source for~~ oil as an energy source was the highest (42%). This then decreased sharply to 33% in 1990. [ 2] By contrast, there was only a slight rise in the proportion of energy ~~source for~~ produced from natural gas by 1%, from 26% in 1980 to 25% in 1990. [ 2] Meanwhile, hydroelectric power was the sole energy source ~~remaining the~~ whose percentage (5%) ~~of 5% from~~ remained the same in both years,1980 to and 1990.

By contrast, there is was a considerable increase in the proportions of ~~energy sources for~~ coal and nuclear power over the given decade. The percentage of ~~energy source for~~ coal as a source of energy went up from 22% in 1980 to 27% in 1990. ~~Only 5%,~~ Finally, the percentage for nuclear power rose by 5% from 1980, ~~then this~~ and reached the percentage of 10% in 1990.

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[ 1]: We just have figures for two individual years. We do not have a graph representing a time range,

[ 2]: Use linking words/expressions to link separate sentences.

Persian Learner · Answer

phamnganThe two pie charts compare the percentage of the main energy sources for four different fuels

There are five sources of energy.

phamnganThere was a slight rise in the proportion of energy source for natural gas by 1%, from 26% in 1980 to 25% in 1990.

No, there was a minor decrease in the use of natural gas over the given period.

phamnganBy contrast, there is a considerable increase in the proportion of energy sources for coal

No, it wasn't a considerable increase compared to the figure for 1980; it was a healthy rise.

phamnganOnly 5%, the percentage for nuclear power rose by 5% from 1980, then this reached the percentage of 10% in 1990.

There was a dramatic growth in the use of nuclear power, doubling from 5% in 1980 to 10% in 1990.

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