Writing (effect)

Hi,

Would anyone please correct this paragraph for me and tell me about my mistakes or the ways that I can make it better? and please tell me whether this development of paragraph is "effect" or "cause".

Tnx a lot

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The effects of improved technology on our life

Technology is an inseparable part of our life and it has both advantages and disadvantages for us. In some parts of our lifetime, it helped us to succeed and develop our skills and in some other parts of it, led to failure. First, let’s talk about its good effects. The aim of technology's existence is to change our lives for the better, faster and more convenient one, and as we realize, It's done it successfully. We can use our smartphones, tablets, laptops and internet connection to send a message in a blink of an eye, search between an extensive source of information instantly, buy everything from online shops with just one click, and so other activities! Technology can have negative effects, too. The social network is one of them. Most of the people believe that social networks simplify the process of communication with others, but in fact, they considerably reduce people's face-to-face connections, and sometimes, people talk to a person giving them false identity, and fooling them. Moreover, there are a lot of channels in social applications which broadcast rumors and suspicions to start arguments between different groups of people. Technology affects our body and causes overweight, too. When we sit and stare at the screen of our smart device for hours, our body just stores lipid and gives us a belly at the end of the month. Furthermore, the signals of wireless gadgets have negative effects on the brain and cause headache. Besides these impacts, technology also shortens the threshold of patience, the span of sleep and decrease the level of creativity and curiosity. In conclusion, technology has pros and cons; besides, If we look around in our lives, we observe technological tools everywhere in all aspects, so we can't abstain using it. What we’d better do is limiting the usage and avoid becoming an addict to them. If we do this we won’t consider it potentially dangerous and we would have a perfect life together with technology.

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