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Meimei MianDianRen Posted 17 years ago
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Writing; Careers;formal letter

Dear all

Colud you please check the following short writing?

Thanks

Her communication skills, both written and verbal, are very good. Furthermore, Mary also has outstanding organizational skills and she is able to successfully complete multiple tasks with favourable results despite deadline pressure and she has got the result of library knowledge test 9 out of 15 marks.
  

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meimei MianDianRen Furthermore, Mary also has outstanding organizational skills and she is able to successfully complete multiple tasks with favourable results despite deadline pressure and she has got the result of library knowledge test 9 out of 15 marks. This piece of writing is quite correct. However, the second sentence is quite long and it could be easier to follow if it is broken down.

— Farihasaleh

  • meimei MianDianRen Furthermore, Mary also has outstanding organizational skills and she is able to successfully complete multiple tasks with favourable results despite deadline pressure and she has got the result of library knowledge test 9 out of 15 marks.
  • This piece of writing is quite correct.
  • However, the second sentence is quite long and it could be easier to follow if it is broken down.
  • Furthermore, she achieved 9 marks out of 15 in the library knowledge test .
  • Hope this helps!
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meimei MianDianRenFurthermore, Mary also has outstanding organizational skills and she is able to successfully complete multiple tasks with favourable results despite deadline pressure and she has got the result of library knowledge test 9 out of 15 marks.

This piece of writing is quite correct. However, the second sentence is quite long and i
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Dear Fariha

Thank you very much for your kindness

salome
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