Writing an e-mail to apply for a job

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Dear Nelson and Harper Inc.,

I am writing this e-mail to apply for the sales representative which posting on your company’s website.

I have graduated from university with a Bachelor Degree and have two-years experience in Unilever, so I strongly believe that I am a qualified candidate for this position. Regarding salary and commission, we can discuss to come up with a more reasonable rate.

I have attached my CV to this email. I hope you will learn more about my background and achievements through my CV. Please let me know if I can provide you with any further information.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Your Sincerely,

Hong Tham