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As well as making money, business also have social respobsibility. Do you agree or disagree?

The idea that, not only had business earned money, but they also have taken resiponsible for society. I completely agree with this idea.

There are a variety of reasons why business havw accountable for society. Firstly, the benefits of companies to gain a lot of profit,they would pay any more taxes to the goverment. Hence, authorities can use these taxes for essential field involving healthcare and education, which improve qualities od life in society. Secondly, thank to earned high income,companies have chances to develop expand business capital, they can create more employment opportunities,to cut down job shortage situation.

Apart from the practical benefits expressed above, i believe that there are many reasons about many companies harm to environment that business must have social responsibility. Firstly, when the factory operating unregulated, it affects to environment to be polluted. It causing global warming from factory emission or responsible disposal of waste. For example, if many factories installed a garbage disposal machine, the pollution o water is more controlled. For instance, unilever anf vinamilk, who business make profit, putted money back into the community through charity and financing schoolarships.

In conclusion, although make profit is the top priority of business, i believe that business should have socially responsible.

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

The idea that, not only had business earned money, but they also have taken resiponsible for society. (

Besides the spelling error, this is a poorly formed sentence. It is not grammatical. and does not make sense.

"The idea that... " this is a noun phrase. To be a sentence, there needs to be a predicate (verb) where "idea" is the subject.

The idea [that the internet would have a global reach with billions of users] seemed ridiculous in 1992.

Your sentence has no verb where "idea" is the subject.

Not only had the business earned money, but it had also employed many ex-convicts who had served their sentences. This is an example of "not only... but also" construction. The tenses of the verbs must match. It is past tense. The actions are completed in the past. You do not want this.

This is the sentence you are trying to make:

I completely agree with the idea that businesses must take responsibility for being a good corporate citizen in society as well as earning money and making a profit.

. ) I completely agree with this idea.

There are a variety of reasons why business havw accountable (wrong form. Accountable is an adjective. You need the noun.) for society. ~~Firstly~~, First, the benefits of companies to gain a lot of profit,they (That is a noun phrase. It is not a good sentence. The comma is incorrect. ) would pay any more taxes to the goverment. Hence, authorities can use these taxes for essential needs of society, especially those ~~field~~ involving healthcare and education, which improve qualities od life (wrong phrase. .. improve the quality of life ) ~~in society~~. ~~Secondly~~, Secondly, thank (Wrong form. "thank" is a verb. e.g. Sheila thanked Jim for the flowers. You need the preposition "thanks to") to earned high income,companies have chances to develop expand (You cannot put two verbs next to each other.) business capital, they can create more employment opportunities,to cut down job shortage situation. (Wrong expression. - to reduce unemployment. )

Apart from the practical benefits expressed above, i ("i" is the 9th letter of the alphabet. It is not a person.) believe that there are many reasons about many companies harm to environment (That makes no sense.) that business must have social responsibility. ~~Firstly~~, First, when the factory operating unregulated, (wrong expression. First, if factories are operated without any controls or regulations, they will pollute the environment.) it affects to environment to be polluted.

I cannot give much more feedback, but have highlighted the bad English. This task is above the present level of your writing ability. You need to do exercises that are at a more basic level. Write simple sentences. Use easy words that you understand. Practice a lot. As you improve your skills, you will be able to do these challenging essays.

It causing global warming from factory emission or responsible disposal of waste. For example, if many factories installed a garbage disposal machine, the pollution o water is more controlled. For instance, unilever anf vinamilk, who business make profit, putted money back into the community through charity and financing schoolarships.

In conclusion, although make profit is the top priority of business, i believe that business should have socially responsible.

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