Writing

Hello everybody, I have a test next week that i need you help me to correct my paragraphs. I am very bad at writting so I wish you can help me. Thank you so much!

P1:

A nuclear family system is a family structure that consists of the parents and their children and it has a lot of advantages and disadvantages. First, abou the advantages. Family family plays an important role in the development of personality of children. Children are more close to the parents and can have more free discussion about their problems with parents which helps us to be active and have a better development. Nuclear family is more harmony than extended family. There is no misunderstanding and they have a peaceful and harmonious asmostphere when they live together because of less number of members in family. This is about advantages of living in nuclear family. Second, about disadvantage. Children living in nuclear family has more dangerous than living in extended family because of less number of people. So their parents can’t take care them carefully. Feeling lonely is one of drawbacks of nuclear family too. After doing the housework, the housewife will be very sad because they don’t have anybody to talk with them. And when they have accidents, no one can help and support them. We have some advantages and disadvantage of living nuclear family. So you should think carefully before chosing what kind of family you like.

P2:

A extended family system is a family structure that consists of the parents,their children grandparents, aunts, uncles, and other relatives and it has a lot of advantages and disadvantages. First, about advantages.Children who live in extended learn faster and have less dangerous because they receive more support and love throughout their lives, from a baby to adulthood. With more number of members, you never feel lonely. People in extended family can work, play and share sorrows together. This is about advantages of living in extendeded family. Second, about disadvantages. Adults have to pay to much money for living expenses because of amount of people. Lacking of privacy is one of big drawbacks of extended family too. When you living in an extended family, you may share your room with the other , so privacy is rather scarce in large families. Children are always spoiled by grandparents or aunts and uncles so they can have bad development easily. You can have too many visitors in the home too and it’s very complicated. You can see some advantages and disadvantage of living in extended family. Consequently, you should think carefully before chosing what kind of family you want to live