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Anonymous Posted 10 years ago
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Hi, can someone help me to check the below writing? Need feedback?
Short summary
A young woman with a wanderlust desire has to stop her adventure, as she is stuck between the warmth of home and her dreams of globetrotting.
Long summary
Rania is a traveling young writer, who is known as Jilbab Traveler for her hijab and her wanderlust muse. One day, she has to stop her adventure as her father gets seriously ill. Unexpectedly, the next flight home is a life changer. She visits the spot where her parents fall in love, and where she will meet a cold Korean photographer who falls for her, and later, a man her sisters try to matchmake. Dilemmatic Rania has to choose, between the warmth of home or the desire of globetrotting.
Short summary
A young woman with a wanderlust desire has to stop her adventure, as she is stuck between the warmth of home and her dreams of globetrotting.
Long summary
Rania is a traveling young writer, who is known as Jilbab Traveler for her hijab and her wanderlust muse. One day, she has to stop her adventure as her father gets seriously ill. Unexpectedly, the next flight home is a life changer. She visits the spot where her parents fall in love, and where she will meet a cold Korean photographer who falls for her, and later, a man her sisters try to matchmake. Dilemmatic Rania has to choose, between the warmth of home or the desire of globetrotting.
Top answer
**** = desire
- **** = desire
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Alright, I just omit the word "desire". Thank you.
Revised as below :
A young woman with a wanderlust has to stop her adventure, as she is stuck between the warmth of home and her dreams of globetrotting
Revised as below :
A young woman with a wanderlust has to stop her adventure, as she is stuck between the warmth of home and her dreams of globetrotting
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