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Anonymous Posted 10 years ago
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Hi kindly let me know if this sentence has any grammatical issue?

Extreme Homes shows an amazing assortment of homes from all over the world. For an instance, a home where the inside can be outside, or residence inspired by a sci-fi movie and a geodesic dome home.
  

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It is a bit sluggish as advertising copy. Extreme Homes shows an amazing assortment of homes from all over the world, including a geodesic dome, one where the inside can be outside, and another inspired by a sci-fi movie.

  • It is a bit sluggish as advertising copy.
  • Extreme Homes shows an amazing assortment of homes from all over the world, including a geodesic dome, one where the inside can be outside, and another inspired by a sci-fi movie.
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It is a bit sluggish as advertising copy.

Extreme Homes shows an amazing assortment of homes from all over the world, including a geodesic dome, one where the inside can be outside, and another inspired by a sci-fi movie.
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Thanks for the feedback. I'll re-work on this, thanks.

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