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Can you edit my personal statement ? Please

To Whom It May Concern,

I am applying for a place on the mechanical engineering course at your university, to expand on my knowledge in this field and to qualify myself to function well since my future career will be mainly an employee in the Engineering field. I believe that Mechanical Eng. at department of Mechanical & aerospace Engineering, Oklahoma State University will prepare me for a very successful and challenging career in the Engineering field.

After I achieved my M.sc degree from National University of Malaysia, I became a lecturer in the Mechanical Engineering Department at the Sebha University, Sebha-Libya. I have had experience in teaching Mechanical Engineering subjects to students at undergraduate level.

At present, I am studying intensive English at the Spring International Language Center – Colorado, and I will finish my English course in the summer,2014. I am writing to you to express my interest in admission to doctoral program at Mechanical Eng. in Thermal fluid and energy area beginning fall,2014.
Thank you for your consideration.
Sincerely,