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0As far as I remember, languages have always interested me in a way or another. I'm just fascinated already for a thought, that someday I'm able to speak 4-5 languages. English was quite natural language to get started. 02br02br00Now I've been studying English more than 6 years, and still I'm not as good as I would wish for. More I have studiet, more I have noticed that it really isn't so simple to learn a new language. And English should be easy, but what about Spanish or France - I have to say that those languages goes far beyond my skills. But I'm not going to fall with my dreams, no, not yet. I know it may be exhausting sometimes to learn more and more, but I keep going. I have decided to do all what it takes. 02br02br00But Im happy about the fact that I have a chance to learn languages so much what I am ready to learn. Everybody are not blessed with the same opportunity. Among all this happiness and joy, I should remember to use my priviledged situation right. 02br02br00-M.N.   02br02br00I know that it doesn't offer more new and revolutionary, bur write your opinions anyway. Thank you.0-

YoHf · Accepted Answer

0As far back as I can remember, I have always been interested in languages. The thought that one day I may be able to speak four or even five languages really fascinates me, moreover I found English quite a natural language to learn. 02br
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00I've studied English for more than 6 years so far, and still I'm not as good as I'd like to. The more I study, the more I notice that it is not such an easy thing to learn a new language. Then again, English is supposed to be quite an easy language to learn, but Spanish or French really go far beyond my natural skill. But even though it will be difficult, I'm not giving up my dreams, at least, not yet. I know perfectly well that sometimes it may be exhausting to try and learn more and more things, yet I'll keep doing it. 02br
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00What I'm really happy about is that I have the chanche to learn those languages, as far as I feel like doing it. In fact, we should all remember that some of us have opportunities that other people may never have, and this is why I'll try and get the most benefits possible from my 'priviledged' situation.02br
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01font00I edited it a bit and corrected some mistakes, some parts where a little awkward, hope that's not a problem. Nice piece anyway, I liked it.02font02br
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01font00Hope this helps.02font02br
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Anonymous · Answer

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01cite10YoHf12cite10As far back as I can remember, I have always been interested in languages. The thought that one day I may be able to speak four or even five languages really fascinates me, moreover I found English quite a natural language to learn. 12br
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10I've studied English for more than 6 years so far, and still I'm not as good as I'd like to. The more I study, the more I notice that it is not such an easy thing to learn a new language. Then again, English is supposed to be quite an easy language to learn, but Spanish or French really go far beyond my natural skill. But even though it will be difficult, I'm not giving up my dreams, at least, not yet. I know perfectly well that sometimes it may be exhausting to try and learn more and more things, yet I'll keep doing it. 12br
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10What I'm really happy about is that I have the chanche to learn those languages, as far as I feel like doing it. In fact, we should all remember that some of us have opportunities that other people may never have, and this is why I'll try and get the most benefits possible from my 'priviledged' situation.12br
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11font10I edited it a bit and corrected some mistakes, some parts where a little awkward, hope that's not a problem. Nice piece anyway, I liked it.12font12br
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11font10Hope this helps.12font12br
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10Thank you Yohf. If you don't mind, would you please point out the exact changes you made and the grammatical reasons for your changes? I am mostly interested to understand my mistakes in style,tone, and grammar mistakes in the essay.0-

Nick147 · Answer

0Hello Anon (MN?) and YoHF,02br
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00YoHF’s re-draft is excellent, with a very good style. You should try and follow the style and rhythm of the English. In case you look at it too closely, there are a couple of minor errors in it which I show below.02br
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00As no-one else has replied to you regarding your original version, I thought I would help and show corrections to your original that don’t change the style. 02br
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00On another thought, you might find you get more replies to your posts if you register with a name! 02br
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00Cheerio! - Nick02br
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00I've studied English for more than 6 years so far, and still I'm not as good as I'd like to 01b00be02b00.1 The more I study, the more I notice that it is not such an easy thing to learn a new language. Then again, English is supposed to be quite an easy language to learn, but Spanish or French really go far beyond my natural skill. But even though it will be difficult, I'm not giving up my dreams, at least, not yet. I know perfectly well that sometimes it may be exhausting to try and learn more and more things, yet I'll keep doing it. 02br
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00What I'm really happy about is that I have the 01b00chance02b00 to learn those languages, as far as I feel like doing it. In fact, we should all remember that some of us have opportunities that other people may never have, and this is why I'll try and get the most 01b00benefit02b002 possible from my '01b00privileged02b00' situation.02br
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001. 01i00as I’d like02i00, or 01i00as I’d like to be02i00, are both OK here, they mean the same thing02br
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002. must be singular02br
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00With the original essay:02br
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00As far as I remember, languages have always interested me in a way or another. [01i00The expression is “in one way or another02i00]” I'm just fascinated [“01i00already02i00” does not make sense here] [with the thought - another expression] that someday I [01i00will be able02i00- you must use the future tense] to speak 4-5 languages. English was quite a natural language to [01i00start with02i00- if you mean that English was an easy or an obvious choice as a first language to learn]. 02br
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00Now I've been studying English more than 6 years, and still I'm not as good as I would wish [01i00for02i00 is not necessary here]. [The] more I have studied, [the] more I have noticed that it really isn't so simple to learn a new language. And English should be easy, but what about Spanish or [01i00French02i00 – France is the country] - I have to say that those languages [01i00go02i00 – “those languages” is third person plural as in 01i00they go02i00] far beyond my skills. But I'm not going to [fail] with my dreams, no, not yet. I know it may be exhausting sometimes to learn more and more, but I [01i00will02i00 – the future tense again, as you will be doing the studying in the future] keep going. I have decided to do all [that] it takes. 02br
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00But [01i00I’m02i00 – missed apostrophe here] happy about the fact that I have a chance to learn languages so much [that] I am [01i00keen02i00 or 01i00eager02i00 to learn- ready to learn would imply that you were just starting to learn]. Everybody[01i00is02i00 – “everybody" is always singular] not blessed with the same opportunity. Among all this happiness and joy, I should remember to use my [01i00privileged02i00 – spelling] situation [01i00correctly02i00. – you have to use an adverb here. You can say “01i00use it right02i00” in casual speech but not in writing, as it is not correct English]. 0-

YoHf · Answer

0Woops, looks like I has a couple of typing mistakes there. 05002br
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00Didn't see them when I read the text again, thanks for noticing and correcting them Nick. 05102br
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