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1 font 00 Write a paragraph of 150-180 words supporting or rejecting the argument that parents should control what their children watch on TV 02 font 02 br
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00 I support that parents should control what their children watch on television. First,nowadays, almost every family can have a 00 television set 00 at home. A lot of children are watching television at a very young age. They really like to imitate what comes into their eyes. That must be their parent’ responsibility to take control them and tell them what they should do in order to behave in a good way. Second, violence programmes are showed as often as not everyday on television, some also contain adult’s categories. Will that suit for children of all ages? Certainly not, especially on the scale of “children” or “kids”. I totally agree. Except for the children who have already grown up, strictly speaking, over 18, can watch whatever they want. Third, watching too much television will result in obese and it does no good to both adult and children. In conclusion, I think parents should only control their kids till the day they’ve matured. 02 br
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00 I support that parents should control what their children watch on television. First,nowadays, almost every family can have a 00 television set 00 at home. A lot of children are watching television at a very young age. They really like to imitate what comes into their eyes. That must be their parent’ responsibility to take control them and tell them what they should do in order to behave in a good way. Second, violence programmes are showed as often as not everyday on television, some also contain adult’s categories. Will that suit for children of all ages? Certainly not, especially on the scale of “children” or “kids”. I totally agree. Except for the children who have already grown up, strictly speaking, over 18, can watch whatever they want. Third, watching too much television will result in obese and it does no good to both adult and children. In conclusion, I think parents should only control their kids till the day they’ve matured. 02 br
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- 02 br 02 br 00 their 01 b 00 parent’ 02 b 00 responsibility to 01 b 00 take control 02 b 00 them 02 br 02 br 01 b 00 violence 02 b 00 programmes 02 br 02 br 00 some also 01 b 00 contain adult’s categories 02 b 00 .
- 02 br 02 br 00 Will that 01 b 00 suit for 02 b 00 children of all ages?
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0 Here's another try, please take a look at it: 02 br
01 font 00 Write a paragraph of 150-180 words supporting or rejecting the argument that parents should control what their children watch on TV 02 font 02 br
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0 A little better in terms of grammar. The whole passage is still awkward, however. 01 blockquote
01 cite 10 Belly 12 cite 10 Here's another try, please take a look at it: 12 br
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