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01 i 00 First of all, for a newcomer to business just as I am, the best way after I leave university is to apply for a good company and try my best to have a good position and especially to gain experiences. Whatever you want, even though you are a brilliant student, you have to have experiences. 02 i 02 br
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01 i 00 Second, working for a big company, under the pressure of the boss, salary, competition for positions, I would have greater motive force that I have to try my best to work. Sometimes that pressure would make me feel anxiety but after all, the pressure that a boss has to suffer is higher than I do. 02 i 02 br
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01 i 00 00 00 Third, to become a boss, you must have not only experiences but also a certain capital; you have to grasp and analyze the market thoroughly, especially, you must take risks and clearly determine that you will have to face with many obstacles to lead your company to success, sometimes, you are on a razor edge to be empty-handed. However, if I were a good employee working for a big company, I would have a reasonable and stable salary monthly. This compares to the boss of an unstable company is far better. 02 i 02 br
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01 i 00 In short, I would rather be a professional employee for a good company than be a boss of a bad one. However if I find myself have all the criteria and conditions to founding my own company, I would consider it cautiously. 02 i 02 br
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00 - does my writing clear ? 02 br
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00 - could you please fix it more formal, clearer and more English 02 br
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0 01 blockquote 01 cite 10 Woawoa 12 cite 10 Some students 11 u 11 b 10 want to 12 b 12 u 11 del 10 have the dream to 12 del 10 go into business 11 del 10 for 12 del 10 themselves 11 b 11 u 10 after graduation 12 u 12 b 10 , while 11 del 10 some 12 del 10 others 11 del 10 are partial to take position in a company and 12 del 10 11 b 11 u 10 prefer to 12 u 12 b 10 work for 11 del 10 it 12 del 11 b 11 u 10 a company 12 u 12 b 10 . 12 br 12 br 10 First of all, for 11 b 11 u 10 someone with no work experience 12 u 12 b 10 , the best way 11 b 11 u 10 to gain some experience 12 u 12 b 10 is to 11 b 11 u 10 work 12 u 12 b 10 for a good company 11 del 10 and try my best to have a good position and especially to gain experiences. 12 del 12 br 12 br 10 Second, working for a big company, under the pressure of the 11 b 11 u 10 work environment 12 u 12 b 11 del 10 boss, salary, competition for positions 12 del 10 , I would have greater 11 b 11 u 10 motivation 12 u 12 b 11 del 10 that I have 12 del 10 to try my best 11 del 10 to work 12 del 10 .
- 0 01 blockquote 01 cite 10 Woawoa 12 cite 10 Some students 11 u 11 b 10 want to 12 b 12 u 11 del 10 have the dream to 12 del 10 go into business 11 del 10 for 12 del 10 themselves 11 b 11 u 10 after graduation 12 u 12 b 10 , while 11 del 10 some 12 del 10 others 11 del 10 are partial to take position in a company and 12 del 10 11 b 11 u 10 prefer to 12 u 12 b 10 work for 11 del 10 it 12 del 11 b 11 u 10 a company 12 u 12 b 10 .
- 12 br 12 br 10 First of all, for 11 b 11 u 10 someone with no work experience 12 u 12 b 10 , the best way 11 b 11 u 10 to gain some experience 12 u 12 b 10 is to 11 b 11 u 10 work 12 u 12 b 10 for a good company 11 del 10 and try my best to have a good position and especially to gain experiences.
- 12 del 12 br 12 br 10 Second, working for a big company, under the pressure of the 11 b 11 u 10 work environment 12 u 12 b 11 del 10 boss, salary, competition for positions 12 del 10 , I would have greater 11 b 11 u 10 motivation 12 u 12 b 11 del 10 that I have 12 del 10 to try my best 11 del 10 to work 12 del 10 .
- 12 br 12 br 10 10 10 Third, to become a boss, you must have not only experiences but also a certain capital; you have to grasp and analyze the market thoroughly, and 11 del 10 especially, 12 del 10 you must take risks and clearly determine that you will have to face 11 del 10 with 12 del 10 many obstacles to lead your company to success 11 del 10 , sometimes, you are on a razor edge to be empty-handed 12 del 10 .
- However, if I were a good employee working for a big company, I would have a reasonable and stable salary monthly.
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