Would you support opening a restaurant in your neighborhood?

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Many people hold the opinion that opening a restaurant in their neighborhood is a good opportunity, while others adhere to an opposite a view. I think I will support the idea of opening a restaurant in my neighborhood because it will be convenient for me to go eat out in a closer place and I can work there as part time employee.

To begin with , I must say it is enjoyable to eat out sometimes and appreciate the atmosphere of a restaurant. There is no doubt that most of restaurants are located in crowded areas and just thinking about going there is stressful. We stress out about finding a parking and how to avoid the heavy traffic. We need to know that having a restaurant in our neighborhood makes our lives easier because we do not have to worry about traffic and we can be there in five minutes walking. My experience when I wanted to celebrate my birthday is a good example of what I mean. We wanted to go celebrate it in very famous restaurant down town. I was wearing a nice dress with high heels so I could not just take the metro there and taking the cob would be very expensive. We decided to drive there and because we know how crowded is there, we had to start driving three hours before our reservation. Also arriving there we spent almost another half hour trying to find a parking spot. I wished that time to have a restaurant in my neighborhood.

Moreover, it is nearly certain that having restaurant in my neighborhood will have open hiring positions. It is convenient to work close to your house. I can recall my own experience whenI was looking for part time job to save money for my trip to Europe. However all the positions I found are far away from my home and I need to drive extra half hour. When they opened the supermarket in my neighborhood I thought that was an outstanding opportunity. I applied there and I was hired after one week. I Ioved working there and because I was full time employee in another company and also because the job was close to my house I could work late there and I was not worry how I will go back home. Furthermore, I did not spend money in public transportation all these money will be added to the saving

In conclusion, I will strongly support the opening of a restaurant in my neighborhood. This is because it is more convenient to eat out and I can have part time job there.