Would you please help me with my MOTIVATION Letter?

Dear everyone,

I'm writing a Motivation Letter for a Master Degree. I've visited this site and followed Nadine's outline.

I'm not a native speaker, so I would aprreciate any comments about it.

Here it is:

"

Dear Ms. M,

I am writing to apply for the Master’s Degree programme in Urbanism and Strategic Planning at KULeuven for the 2012 spring term. I am very interested in this degree and I believe my strong academic background in Engineering combined with my relevant experience fulfill your requirements.

I have graduated in July 2011, specializing in Bridge – Road Construction through the Bachelor of Civil Engineering Degree, at the University of Transport and Communications in Vietnam. My degree focuses on engineering design, traffic management and urban planning. Through my studies I became fascinated with issues that affect urban development and future of urbanity.

The metropolitan areas are interesting to study because they are places where different cultures and urban practices encounter each other. In the age of globalization, multimedia communication and migration, these urban areas are increasingly changing. The urban spaces are in need of new strategies that deal with the problems of housing diversity, urban intensity and sustainability. I am attracted to study the urban condition as well as analyze the urban design strategies and practices.

In my last semester, I received a scholarship to study at Technische Universität Darmstadt, Germany from November 2010 to January 2011. This internship allowed me to gain valuable experience not only with living and studying abroad but also with researching, synthesizing and practicing new concepts of project design and management. I have successfully completed my tasks and received excellent compliments from my supervisors.

Furthermore, during the Christmas season 2010, I had an opportunity to travel to Brussels. The magnificent and diverse architecture together with logical urban planning there made an impression on me. As a result, I long to study Urbanism and Strategic Planning at Katholieke Universiteit Leuven and apply what I will have learned to the specific situations of my hometown, Ho Chi Minh City.

On that occasion, I seized the chance to speak about the Master’s Degree Programme with Mr. Pham, an architecture manager of Bureau d'architectes A_Fine Office sprl. Concerning my special interest in design and planning, I will have been admitted to his office by the time I lived in Brussels. Thus, I am excited by my decision to pursue my Master’s Degree.

Finally, Katholieke Universiteit Leuven which is an academic institution, providing high-quality interdisciplinary research and education is the best surrounding for me to exert myself and achieve my goals.

With a solid foundation in academic theory on urban planning, I am confident that I have the enthusiasm, ambition and motivation to exceed the requirements and I will do my best to excel within the Master’s Degree programme in Urbanism and Strategic Planning at Katholieke Universiteit Leuven for the 2012 spring term.

Thank you very much for considering my request. I look forward to your positive response.

Yours faithfully,"

Thank you in advance,

LAHP