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The long-awaited project to transform the former Kai Tak airport into a modern disrict has finally been revealed,which is expected to cost taxpayers more than $HK100 billion.
However,there are concerns over how our most precious vacant piece of land can be used.Write an article for your school newspaper,discussing uses of the land and giving your own opinion.Give you article a title.
Kai Tak set to go ahead
''Hastes make a big loss.''The development plan has at long last been unveiled by the government to transform the former Kai Tak airport into a modern district,which is anticipated to cost taxpayers more than $HK100 billion.As the tremendous piece of land possessing a huge potential gain has been renovated,thousands of job oppourtnities will be created in 2012.It is hoped that the project can stimulate our flagging economy.
Since it is plotted on a populous district,the diverse developing direction is more than welcome based on the conprehensive investigation conducted.Different works of life sent their recommending letter to the official department.Referred to the social forum,dense buildings may worsen the air quality hence the medical demand tends to shift upward.But on the other hand,the skyrocketing value of the distributed skyscrapers ought to serve the residents.
After all,as a matter of fact,it is beyond disputes that multifaceted better-developed uses will be shapen.Without neither local features nor economic snowballing,it is definitely indeniable to succeed.
Equally crucial is the construction of walkways and foorbridges inside and within districts.Only by this can Kai Tak be not too disgusting and frustrating and really assimilate into society.
It is franchise that the project is expected to provide the territory with a package of contribution,but extra emphasis according to the expertise and experience should be affrimed.
To conclude,there are still few years for professionals to listen various opinions,which is an embellished role affect our sightseeing spots.
Thanks for your reading.
L am looking forward to replying your comment in any convenience.
Thank you again
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The long-awaited project to transform the former Kai Tak airport into a modern disrict has finally been revealed,which is expected to cost taxpayers more than $HK100 billion.
However,there are concerns over how our most precious vacant piece of land can be used.Write an article for your school newspaper,discussing uses of the land and giving your own opinion.Give you article a title.
Kai Tak set to go ahead
''Hastes make a big loss.''The development plan has at long last been unveiled by the government to transform the former Kai Tak airport into a modern district,which is anticipated to cost taxpayers more than $HK100 billion.As the tremendous piece of land possessing a huge potential gain has been renovated,thousands of job oppourtnities will be created in 2012.It is hoped that the project can stimulate our flagging economy.
Since it is plotted on a populous district,the diverse developing direction is more than welcome based on the conprehensive investigation conducted.Different works of life sent their recommending letter to the official department.Referred to the social forum,dense buildings may worsen the air quality hence the medical demand tends to shift upward.But on the other hand,the skyrocketing value of the distributed skyscrapers ought to serve the residents.
After all,as a matter of fact,it is beyond disputes that multifaceted better-developed uses will be shapen.Without neither local features nor economic snowballing,it is definitely indeniable to succeed.
Equally crucial is the construction of walkways and foorbridges inside and within districts.Only by this can Kai Tak be not too disgusting and frustrating and really assimilate into society.
It is franchise that the project is expected to provide the territory with a package of contribution,but extra emphasis according to the expertise and experience should be affrimed.
To conclude,there are still few years for professionals to listen various opinions,which is an embellished role affect our sightseeing spots.
Thanks for your reading.
L am looking forward to replying your comment in any convenience.
Thank you again
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Anon: I did not find your opinion in the article. There are many sentences that are very hard to understand. I have underlined the problem areas, and made some comments.
- Anon: I did not find your opinion in the article.
- There are many sentences that are very hard to understand.
- I have underlined the problem areas, and made some comments.
- Anonymous Hastes make a big loss.
- ) The development plan has at long last been unveiled by the government to transform the former Kai Tak airport into a modern district,which is anticipated to cost taxpayers more than $HK100 billion.
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Anon: I did not find your opinion in the article. There are many sentences that are very hard to understand. I have underlined the problem areas, and made some comments.
AnonymousHastes make a big loss. (what is hastes?) The development plan has at long last been unveiled by the government to transform the former Kai Tak airport into a mo
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Dear Sir/Madum,
L am sincerely thank for your accurate comment.
As you mention that,l am enlightened that l have to write a clear sentence more than confusing.
Similarly,l should remind my usage of tenses and phrases,thereby less mistakes maybe depict my passage more imperative.
Thank you again!L hope l can write a well-organized after rectifying the fault.
L am sincerely thank for your accurate comment.
As you mention that,l am enlightened that l have to write a clear sentence more than confusing.
Similarly,l should remind my usage of tenses and phrases,thereby less mistakes maybe depict my passage more imperative.
Thank you again!L hope l can write a well-organized after rectifying the fault.
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