Would you please correct my motivation lettrer.

To ××× UniversityandTo whom it may concern,
“If numbers aren't beautiful, I don't know what is.” Paul Erdos (1913-1996)
I have always believed that mathematics is an important factor in life. All human activities in several fields such as economics, physics, social science and so on will run well if they are defined in a proper mathematical framework. Mathematics is a genuine reflection of life, all based on definite logic, and ironically very simple principles. As we discover it further, it includes indeed the most complicated, yet real patterns inspired by the nature and the world we live in.
In my opinion, the more essential knowledge one acquires, the easier he can lead a full and enhanced life. Nowadays, one’s expertise to a better world would require as much adherence as possible in a variety of topics and the capacity to relate them. Mathematics is a multi-purpose tool which realizes this goal, as it gives an intellectual, vivid astuteness and innovation to every mind. These are what mathematics has equipped me with over the years.
The mathematics has always intrigued me to the most certain amount. As an 8-year-old, I took so much pleasure in numbers that I would walk around for hours calculating in my mind. I was always very bright in understanding concepts of mathematics, and every year I participated in national contests in my country, Iran, in my own level. I would get honors, among them being second and third in the city of ××× in different years, and it led me to have further education during my school years as an exceptional talent in this field.

To enter public universities in ×××, every student has to pass an entrance exam at the end of 12 years of study. I participated in this exam and I was admitted to enter universities, I chose MATHEMATICS. Thereafter, I was admitted in ××× University for MSc, I opted to go with Applied Mathematics- numerical Analysis, as it is extraordinarily enriched with mathematical topics. During my education, I redirected my enthusiastic endeavors to Mathematics and irs branches. My research topic in this course was follows:

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So I want to devote my study on ×××.I think it is a multidimensional major and it is also interfaculty field based on mathematical methods and concerning the manipulation and optimization of industrial and financial processes. Considering the undeniable applications of mathematics in , I have gained the utmost satisfaction of studying in these areas, from which I can proudly refer to topics of mathematics and ×××.Considering [country]’ appetite for science, and the esteemed status of ××× University all over the world, I chose [country] as my destination. On the other hands, [country]’ enriched cultural society affirmed my initial fascination with this country, and the tremendous opportunities that [country]’ universities offer students with different backgrounds captivated my mind and ambitions. These unique circumstances motivated me to apply for a Ph.D. in ××× University, which holds a highly-regarded position among academic institutes worldwide. Besides, my lifelong passion for [country] grew more immense in time and it led me to study its diverse aspects. In addition, by studying at the ××× University, I would obtain the opportunity to expand my knowledge in a variety of directions which would all be ultimately governed by the profound influence of the specific major and university itself..
Since ××× University specializes in Mathematic sciences, my education in the University of ××× would be very relevant and worthwhile for a more technical approach towards a practical, future-oriented career. As a consequence, I would like to pursue my career In ×××, as mentioned before. In addition, I deepen my academic aptitude as a researcher by moving to ××× University to follow the Ph.D. program on Mathematic Engineering. In a word, the courses would all lead me to a future in which I have a wider range of possibilities and chances in order to either continue my education for a PhD degree, or achieve a more unique and functional method to use mathematics in quest of a specific target in numerous domains.
In conclusion, what I most certainly would obtain by studying Mathematics at ××× University, is not only formal education in a field that has interested me for a long time, but also an effective way to develop my knowledge and abilities so that I could be more well-informed and competent, both in research and practical areas.

Yours faithfully,

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