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Anonymous Posted 18 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Would you please correct my mistakes on IELS writing subject
0 00 Hi, I will take IELTS general and now practicing writing. 00 Wondering if some native speakers are kind enough to help me correcting my poor writing. 02 br
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00 1.You have had a bank account for a few years. Recently you received a letter from the bank stating that your account is $240 overdrawn and that you will be charged $70 which will be taken directly from your account. You know that this information is incorrect. Write a letter to the bank. Explain what has happened and say what you would like them to do about it. 02 br
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00 Dear Sirs/Madams, 00 I was wondering if you could explain about the $70 automatically charged. 00 It was claimed that my account is $240 overdrawn. 00 Though, I checked my account record carefully, but there has not been such a shortage. 00 So, this should have been some sort of mistake. 00 Would you please check and if you find any evidence, please transfer it to me. 00 I would like to make sure when the overdraw happened and what was the cause if there is any. 00 Please return the $70 if you find this is just a mistake. 00 Let me mention I have been paying attention not to pay any extra money for overdrawn staff, so been careful managing account. 00 This should not have happen to me. 00 Please also let me know the cause why this has happened. 00 My name, account NO., address and tel NO. are below. 00 And attached is the statement you send. 00 I appreciate your help I advance. 02 br
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00 Thank you very much!! 02 br
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00 Task 1: 02 br
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00 Write at least 150 words. 02 br
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00 You do not need to write your own address. 02 br
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00 Begin your letter as follows: 02 br
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00 Dear......................., 02 br
00 1.You have had a bank account for a few years. Recently you received a letter from the bank stating that your account is $240 overdrawn and that you will be charged $70 which will be taken directly from your account. You know that this information is incorrect. Write a letter to the bank. Explain what has happened and say what you would like them to do about it. 02 br
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00 Dear Sirs/Madams, 00 I was wondering if you could explain about the $70 automatically charged. 00 It was claimed that my account is $240 overdrawn. 00 Though, I checked my account record carefully, but there has not been such a shortage. 00 So, this should have been some sort of mistake. 00 Would you please check and if you find any evidence, please transfer it to me. 00 I would like to make sure when the overdraw happened and what was the cause if there is any. 00 Please return the $70 if you find this is just a mistake. 00 Let me mention I have been paying attention not to pay any extra money for overdrawn staff, so been careful managing account. 00 This should not have happen to me. 00 Please also let me know the cause why this has happened. 00 My name, account NO., address and tel NO. are below. 00 And attached is the statement you send. 00 I appreciate your help I advance. 02 br
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00 01 b 00 However, 02 b 00 I 01 b 00 have 02 b 00 checked my account 01 b 00 records 02 b 00 carefully, 01 b 00 and 02 b 00 there 01 b 00 is no such 02 b 00 shortage 01 b 00 , so 02 b 00 this 00 01 b 00 must be 02 b 00 some sort of mistake. 00 Would you please check 01 b 00 and send me any 02 b 00 evidence 01 b 00 to the contrary 02 b 00 . 02 i 00 ) 0-
- 00 01 b 00 However, 02 b 00 I 01 b 00 have 02 b 00 checked my account 01 b 00 records 02 b 00 carefully, 01 b 00 and 02 b 00 there 01 b 00 is no such 02 b 00 shortage 01 b 00 , so 02 b 00 this 00 01 b 00 must be 02 b 00 some sort of mistake.
- 00 Would you please check 01 b 00 and send me any 02 b 00 evidence 01 b 00 to the contrary 02 b 00 .
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01 b 00 Could you please supply further documentation on 02 b 00 the $70 automatically charged 01 b 00 to my account 02 b 00 . 02 br
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01 b 00 Could you please supply further documentation on 02 b 00 the $70 automatically charged 01 b 00 to my account 02 b 00 . 02 br
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00 Personally, I do think that you have fully understood the question. 02 br
00 Frist all, its about the overdrawn in your account..........following by the ' bank will charged $70 from your account", which means that it havent happen yet, but its going to happen soon. That is the reason you are writting this letter to the bank to explain the whole situatio
00 Personally, I do think that you have fully understood the question. 02 br
00 Frist all, its about the overdrawn in your account..........following by the ' bank will charged $70 from your account", which means that it havent happen yet, but its going to happen soon. That is the reason you are writting this letter to the bank to explain the whole situatio
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Please help to check on my letter, thank you in advance
Dear Sir/Madam, In reply to your letter dated 21 August, I am writing to clarify that the $240 overdrawn was caused by your mistake and obviously the $70 charge shall not be imposed on me. I have had a car loan facility with your bank since January 2006. The monthly installment of car loan was $300 per month and it has been auto de
Dear Sir/Madam, In reply to your letter dated 21 August, I am writing to clarify that the $240 overdrawn was caused by your mistake and obviously the $70 charge shall not be imposed on me. I have had a car loan facility with your bank since January 2006. The monthly installment of car loan was $300 per month and it has been auto de
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Hi,
You need to organize your letter into paragraphs.
The simplest approach is this.
Paragraph 1 - Briefly explain why you are writing to them.
Paragraph 2 - Explain the problem in detail.
Paragraph 3 - Say politely what you want them to do.
Paragraph 4 - Thank them for their forthcoming help.
After you do this, repost your letter for
You need to organize your letter into paragraphs.
The simplest approach is this.
Paragraph 1 - Briefly explain why you are writing to them.
Paragraph 2 - Explain the problem in detail.
Paragraph 3 - Say politely what you want them to do.
Paragraph 4 - Thank them for their forthcoming help.
After you do this, repost your letter for
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Dear Sir/Madam,
In reply to your letter dated 21 August, I am writing to clarify that the $240 overdrawn was caused by your mistake and obviously the $70 charge shall not be imposed on me.
I have had a car loan facility with your bank since January 2006. The monthly installment of car loan was $300 per month and it has been auto debit from my account. Recently I sold of
In reply to your letter dated 21 August, I am writing to clarify that the $240 overdrawn was caused by your mistake and obviously the $70 charge shall not be imposed on me.
I have had a car loan facility with your bank since January 2006. The monthly installment of car loan was $300 per month and it has been auto debit from my account. Recently I sold of
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Hi,
Much better.[Y]
Clive
Dear..,
1.You have had a bank account for a few years. Recently you received a letter from the bank stating that your account is $240 overdrawn and that you will be charged $70 which will be taken directly from your account. You know that this information is incorrect. Write a letter to the bank. Explain what has happ
Much better.[Y]
Clive
Dear..,
1.You have had a bank account for a few years. Recently you received a letter from the bank stating that your account is $240 overdrawn and that you will be charged $70 which will be taken directly from your account. You know that this information is incorrect. Write a letter to the bank. Explain what has happ
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how about this?? please correct me
Dear Sir,
Subject - regarding letter received from the bank for debit of $70 to my account
I am account holder of your bank since from 3 years,bearing account number xxxxxxxxx, today I have received a letter from your branch addressing that $240 overdrawn money from my account.
According to me I have not overdrawn as I was out of station for
Dear Sir,
Subject - regarding letter received from the bank for debit of $70 to my account
I am account holder of your bank since from 3 years,bearing account number xxxxxxxxx, today I have received a letter from your branch addressing that $240 overdrawn money from my account.
According to me I have not overdrawn as I was out of station for
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Please reply to me. how you people you would rate for my this letter.
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mateenamcPlease reply to me. how you people you would rate for my this letter.You haven't posted a letter.
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