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Osmancataloluk Posted 10 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Would you please correct me, regards

My mother never said that she could go against her husband. However her girl's experience of parental love with her grandfather pretty much served as the model to what a male should be, and Solomon was so a dominant example that she would never need a father image better than her grandfather later in life -- that her love could help make her self-esteem.
  

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" But I still don't make the connection of this part of the paragraph to the rest of the paragraph. My mother never said that she could go against her husband. However her girl's experience of parental love with her grandfather pretty much served as the model to of what a male should be, and Solomon was so a dominant example ( so dominant an example, or such a dominant example ) that she would never need a father image better than her grandfather later in life -- that her love could help make her self-esteem.

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  • " But I still don't make the connection of this part of the paragraph to the rest of the paragraph.
  • My mother never said that she could go against her husband.
  • However her girl's experience of parental love with her grandfather pretty much served as the model to of what a male should be, and Solomon was so a dominant example ( so dominant an example, or such a dominant example ) that she would never need a father image better than her grandfather later in life -- that her love could help make her self-esteem.
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I don't understand the part at the end after the dash: "that her love could help make her self-esteem." Maybe you need to omit "that." But I still don't make the connection of this part of the paragraph to the rest of the paragraph.

My mother never said that she could go against her husband. However her girl's experience of parental love with her grandfather pretty much served as the mode
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