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Essay & Composition Writing
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Hi everyone....this is an essay which i need u take a look at ..please correct my mistakes
Cosmetic surgery
Cosmetic surgery has become one of the most popular trends in the world today. Whether we are reading a magazine, watching the news, or a television program, we are likely to see something about cosmetic surgery.
Millions of people undergo risky surgery every year simply to improve or enhance a feature or body part. While the results may seem foolproof and glamorous, it is actually a very risky procedure. Cosmetic surgery is an individual's choice and if you want to have it done and you have the money then go for it. Such procedure is acceptable if there is a reasonable causes. In my point of view, However, having it done should only be acceptable if it is for `medical' reasons, which can include psychological ones.
I don't agree with people who have, for example, breast reduction surgery just for cosmetic reasons .They can be described as superficial and obsessed with looks. They may forgot that every single human is perfectly created and designed by God. In fact , we should thank God for the blessing of health which many other people may do not have.
On the other hand , there are some people who need such procedure. cosmetic surgery is intended and reserved to assist wounded and deformed soldiers in war. Soldiers that would return from battle with missing legs and cut faces entrusted their appearance to the hands of skilled surgeons.
To summarize, cosmetic surgery should not be a mere trend. We as wise people should not straggle to change something given to us from God unless it is something deserved to be changed.
Cosmetic surgery
Cosmetic surgery has become one of the most popular trends in the world today. Whether we are reading a magazine, watching the news, or a television program, we are likely to see something about cosmetic surgery.
Millions of people undergo risky surgery every year simply to improve or enhance a feature or body part. While the results may seem foolproof and glamorous, it is actually a very risky procedure. Cosmetic surgery is an individual's choice and if you want to have it done and you have the money then go for it. Such procedure is acceptable if there is a reasonable causes. In my point of view, However, having it done should only be acceptable if it is for `medical' reasons, which can include psychological ones.
I don't agree with people who have, for example, breast reduction surgery just for cosmetic reasons .They can be described as superficial and obsessed with looks. They may forgot that every single human is perfectly created and designed by God. In fact , we should thank God for the blessing of health which many other people may do not have.
On the other hand , there are some people who need such procedure. cosmetic surgery is intended and reserved to assist wounded and deformed soldiers in war. Soldiers that would return from battle with missing legs and cut faces entrusted their appearance to the hands of skilled surgeons.
To summarize, cosmetic surgery should not be a mere trend. We as wise people should not straggle to change something given to us from God unless it is something deserved to be changed.
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I'm responding to your essay that you posted for corrections. You don't have to take my advice or make any changes I suggest, I'm only trying to help.. 1.
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I'm responding to your essay that you posted for corrections. You don't have to take my advice or make any changes I suggest, I'm only trying to help..
1. Forgot- the word should be forget
2. "other people do not have"- remove the word may
Good essay...If you need more help I am willing to do so
1. Forgot- the word should be forget
2. "other people do not have"- remove the word may
Good essay...If you need more help I am willing to do so
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Grammerstar21..thanks alot for ur responding .I am so glad that you did read my essay.I 'll take your advise.Thanks for the help.In fact I need more help with other essays which I'll post soon
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Putting your text right justified makes it harder to read and seems to be doing odd things to your punctuation.
Some of your arguments don't follow.
First you say if you have the money, go for it. Then you say it should only be done for medical reasons only.
You need to fix this: In my point of view, However, having it done should only be acceptable if it is for `medic
Some of your arguments don't follow.
First you say if you have the money, go for it. Then you say it should only be done for medical reasons only.
You need to fix this: In my point of view, However, having it done should only be acceptable if it is for `medic
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hi grammergeek..
Thanks for reading my essay and for your notes.They were helpful.I'm gonna rewrite it again trying to follow your advices .
Actually I have another essay which I would like you take a look if you don't mind ...I'll be grateful if you did so..
thanks again
Thanks for reading my essay and for your notes.They were helpful.I'm gonna rewrite it again trying to follow your advices .
Actually I have another essay which I would like you take a look if you don't mind ...I'll be grateful if you did so..
thanks again
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I like this essay becoz our body are perfect and is from the love of my mom and dad ^^ Thanks
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