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Persian Learner Posted 10 years ago
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setting out to conquer the other six Chinese states, he not only ended the power of those other six kingdoms, but also unified seven kingdoms and started a centralized imperial system that lasted more than 2000 years.
setting out to conquer the other six Chinese states, he not only ended the power of those other six kingdoms, but also unified seven kingdoms and started a centralized imperial system that lasted more than 2000 years.
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A revision: setting out to conquer the other six Chinese states, he not only managed to occupy those kingdoms but also unified seven kingdoms into a centralized imperial system that lasted more than 2000 years.
- A revision: setting out to conquer the other six Chinese states, he not only managed to occupy those kingdoms but also unified seven kingdoms into a centralized imperial system that lasted more than 2000 years.
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A revision:
setting out to conquer the other six Chinese states, he not only managed to occupy those kingdoms but also unified seven kingdoms into a centralized imperial system that lasted more than 2000 years.
setting out to conquer the other six Chinese states, he not only managed to occupy those kingdoms but also unified seven kingdoms into a centralized imperial system that lasted more than 2000 years.
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My final try:
Setting out to conquer the other six Chinese kingdoms, he not only managed to occupy those states but
Setting out to conquer the other six Chinese kingdoms, he not only managed to occupy those states but
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Persian LearnerSetting out to conquer the other six Chinese kingdoms, he not only managed to occupy those states, but also unified the seven kingdoms into a centralized imperial system that lasted more than 2000 years.Okay.
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