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Michael owen Posted 14 years ago
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Would you mind helping me correct these sentences? I am appreciated.

Admittedly, some people will work harder to obtain public recognition even though there is no more money given. This is because they feel proud when they walk on the street everyone recognize and admire them. What's more, being famous means they can finish things easily. For example, if a figure lost his watch on the street someday, he can post a message like "I lost my watch on the Brand Street today. Can you give me a hand to find it out" I believe without a few minutes, a large amount of his fans will come out on the Brand Street. These are two motivations that encourage them to pursuit public recognition.
  

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Hello, Micheal—and welcome to English Forums. I have underlined some areas that need work and struck out inappropriate text. Please revise and post your revised text here for review .

  • Hello, Micheal—and welcome to English Forums.
  • I have underlined some areas that need work and struck out inappropriate text.
  • Please revise and post your revised text here for review .
  • Admittedly, some people will work harder to obtain public recognition even though there is no more money given .
  • This is because they feel proud when they walk on the street e veryone recognize and admire them.
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Hello, Micheal—and welcome to English Forums. I have underlined some areas that need work and struck out inappropriate text. Please revise and post your revised text here for review.

Admittedly, some people will work harder to obtain public recognition even though there is no more money given. This is because they feel proud when they walk on the street everyone
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Thank you, I have revised and can you help me check out again. Thank you.

"Admittedly, some people will work harder to obtain public recognition even though they won't gain any money. This is because they feel proud that when they walk on the street everyone recognizes and admires them. What's more, being famous means they can complete things easily. For example, if a figure lose his watc
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Much better, Michael.

Admittedly, some people will work harder to obtain public recognition even though they won't earn any more money. This is because they feel proud that when they walk on the street everyone recognizes and admires them. What's more, being famous means they can accomplish things easily. For example, if a recognized figure loses his watch on t

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